Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart showes utilization of time by aullts in 1958 and 2008 in catogerys like working, relexing at home, sleeping, travelling to work, going out with friends and family, and playing sports

Overall, playing sports is the one activity that reamin unchanged in both the time frame. utilization of time in reduced for sleeping and going out on the other hand relaxing at home

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two years and several chart categories, and you attempt an overview by noting changes in activities. However, the overview is substantially inaccurate: sports appears only in 2008, so it cannot be described as unchanged. The statement that sleeping and going out decreased is partly correct, but the comparison about relaxing is unfinished and unclear. No figures are reported, and the response does not describe the major shifts, such as working rising from 33% to 42% and going out falling from 19% to 6%. The response is also well below the required 150 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. Include accurate key figures and comparisons, and complete the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening description and a separate overview, which gives the reader some sense of structure. The second paragraph also signals comparison with “on the other hand.” However, the response has no clear progression beyond these two brief statements: it does not group or compare the chart information in a developed way. The final phrase, “on the other hand relaxing at home,” is incomplete, so the relationship between the activities is difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main comparisons, and connect complete ideas with clear linking expressions such as “whereas” or “by contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “working,” “sleeping,” “travelling to work,” and “going out with friends and family,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors make the writing harder to read, including “showes,” “aullts,” “catogerys,” “relexing,” and “reamin.” The phrase “utilization of time” is repeated and sounds unnatural for describing proportions of a day; “time spent on activities” would be clearer. “In reduced” is also an inaccurate word combination. Aim for accurate chart language such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “fell to,” while checking spelling and avoiding repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response shows an attempt to use an overview sentence and a contrast, but grammatical control is weak and the sentence patterns are very limited. In “The pie chart showes utilization,” the singular subject requires “shows.” The overview sentence “playing sports is the one activity that reamin unchanged” has an incorrect verb form and an inaccurate construction; a clearer pattern would be “Sports is shown only in 2008.” The final sentence, “utilization of time in reduced for sleeping and going out on the other hand relaxing at home,” lacks a clear grammatical structure and punctuation, making its meaning difficult to interpret. Practise complete sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and punctuation.

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