Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given pie chart depicts the percentage of days invest by younger generations on different types of activities in 1958 and 2008.

To commence with, alarming working adults contributes 42% in the year of 2008 as compared to 1958 in which is 33%. So that 6% individuals are interested to go with family and friends whereas 19 % people in respective year. The greater number of people get relaxed at home is 13%.

Furthermore, the 32% sleeping people accounted in previous year in 1958. The people who are traveling for their work 2% as well as 7% respective years. And also 7% person who choose to spent their time into playing sports.

To conclude, highest number of people accounted for work, get relaxed and travel for work in 2008, whereas greater number of people contribute to sleep and go out with family and friends in 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant comparisons, including the rise in working time from 33% to 42%, the fall in socialising from 19% to 6%, and the change in travel time from 2% to 7%. However, the response gives only a limited account of the charts: it omits the 2008 sleeping figure and does not clearly report the 1958 figure for relaxing at home. The opening also misidentifies the group as “younger generations,” although the charts concern working adults, and the overview incorrectly says travel was among the highest activities in 2008. The response is four words below the required minimum. To improve, accurately identify the subject, include the main figures for both years, and give a clear overview of the largest increases and decreases.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, two body paragraphs and a concluding sentence, and it uses some linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “To conclude.” This helps the reader recognise that you are comparing the two years. However, the progression is not consistently clear: figures for different activities are grouped together without a clear organising principle, and phrases such as “as well as 7% respective years” make the comparison difficult to follow. The conclusion repeats claims rather than bringing the main trends together, and “To commence with” is an awkward transition into the data. Organise the body by major changes or by year, and use clear comparison phrases such as “compared with” and “whereas.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “accounted for,” “relaxed at home,” and “traveling for their work,” so the reader can identify the activities being discussed. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes obscuring meaning. “Percentage of days invest” does not describe the share of a day spent on activities, while “alarming working adults contributes” is not an appropriate way to report a chart figure. “Interested to go with family and friends” also changes the meaning: the chart reports time spent going out, not people’s interest. Aim for precise, neutral reporting language and accurate collocations, rather than evaluative words such as “alarming.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the reader can understand some comparisons, such as “32% sleeping people accounted in previous year in 1958.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between figures unclear. Examples include “working adults contributes 42%,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “in the year of 2008 as compared to 1958 in which is 33%,” which has a faulty clause structure. The sentence beginning “The people who are traveling…” also lacks a clear grammatical link between the two percentages. Practise forming complete comparison sentences with accurate verb forms, articles and prepositions, for example: “The proportion spent on work rose from 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008.”

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