Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the percentages of the time spent by working adults on different activities in 1858 and 2008.

Overall, working accounted for the largest proportion of the day in both years, and the percentage of time spent in working increased considerably in 2008. In contrast, going out with family/friends decreased remarkably over the period.

In 1958, Adults spent almost equal time in working and sleeping 33% and 32% respectively. Going out with friends/family accounted for one-fifth of the day 19%. Relaxing at home about 8% which was half of the outing. The least time of the day they spent on travelling about 2% only.

In 2008, the largest proportion of the day was spent working at 42% up, from 33% in 1958 it showed the significant rise in the percentage of time spent working. Conversely, going out with family/friends about only 6% of the day, from 19%. Similarly, sleeping also showed decreased remarkably in the percentage from 32% to 25% in 2008. Travelling experienced a rise in the proportion about 7% from 2%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: working takes the largest share in both years and rises, while going out with friends or family falls sharply. The figures you give for the main categories are generally consistent with the charts, and you also report changes in sleeping and commuting. However, the overview is brief and does not mention the new sports category in 2008, nor does the report compare the full range of activities. Some details are also unclear, such as “42% up, from 33%,” which makes the comparison less precise. To strengthen the response, include the 7% allocated to sports in 2008 and present the key changes in a clearer, more balanced summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. This makes the information easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “Conversely” help signal comparisons. The organisation is coherent, but the progression within the final paragraph is somewhat list-like, and some links between figures are awkward or incomplete—for example, “42% up, from 33% in 1958 it showed…” combines several ideas without clear punctuation. The comparison between years could be more consistently integrated rather than reported year by year. Use complete comparison sentences and clearer punctuation to make the relationships between figures more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “proportion,” “decreased,” and “experienced a rise.” These choices help describe the chart and its trends, and the meaning is generally clear. Some wording is repetitive or imprecise, however: “percentage of time spent in working” is less natural than a direct phrase such as “time spent working,” while “decreased remarkably” and “significant rise” are repeated or broad descriptions. “About only 6%” is also an awkward combination. Aim for more precise collocations and vary the language used to describe increases and decreases; this will make the report sound more controlled and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrastive structures such as “In contrast” and “Conversely,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical and punctuation errors nevertheless occur. For example, “Relaxing at home about 8%” lacks a finite verb, and “Going out with friends/family accounted for one-fifth of the day 19%” needs punctuation or a linking phrase before the figure. The sentence beginning “42% up, from 33% in 1958” is also not a complete, clearly structured comparison. There are occasional issues with articles and capitalisation, such as “Adults” mid-sentence. Build complete clauses and check sentence boundaries, especially when adding figures.

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