Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts give information about working adults in a specific nation, and they were spending their time in the year of1958 and 2008. Units are measured in percentages.

Overall, working was the most popular, and yielded the highest proportion in both mentioned years. In 1958, travelling to work showed the minimum percentage. Similarly, in 2008, going out with friends and family denoted the least proportion of activity.

In 1958, almost one third accounted for the activity working at 33%, followed by sleeping at 32%, going out with friends and family at 19%, relaxing at home at 8%, and travelling to work 2%. It is noticeable that going out with friends and family was reduced by two thirds in the year of 2008 at 6%, whereas travelling to work was increased by slightly more than two thirds in 2008 at 7%.

In 2008, working activity was made for the highest at 42%, followed by sleeping at 25%, relaxing at home at 13%, travelling to work 7%, playing sports at 7%, and going out with friends and family at 6%. It is clear that travelling to work and playing sports were contributed the same at 7%. While sleeping activity was decresed by 7% in 2008, the relaxing activity was increased by 5% in the year of 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both years and report the main categories with figures that match the charts. The overview identifies working as the largest share in both years and correctly notes the smallest categories: commuting in 1958 and socialising in 2008. You also select useful changes, including the fall in socialising from 19% to 6% and the rise in working from 33% to 42%. This gives the response a clear account of the key features. Some comparisons are less fully developed, however: the overview could highlight the broad shift towards work and commuting and away from sleep and socialising, while the final paragraph mostly lists figures. Also distinguish percentage-point changes from proportional changes; sleeping fell by 7 percentage points, not simply “by 7%.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing each year. This makes the information easy to locate, and sequencing the categories by share in each year is generally logical. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical, though, with repeated patterns such as “In 1958” and “In 2008,” and repeated use of “followed by.” The sentence beginning “While sleeping activity was decreased…” is attached to the preceding point in a way that makes the comparison feel abrupt. Use more deliberate grouping—for example, compare categories that rose together and those that fell—and make links between sentences express the relationship between the data rather than simply adding another figure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to describe the chart, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “reduced,” and the reader can understand the comparisons. However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise for this task: “yielded the highest proportion,” “denoted the least proportion,” and “working activity was made for the highest” do not express the data idiomatically. “Travelling to work was increased” also uses an unsuitable verb choice, while “decresed” is misspelled. Repeated reliance on “activity” and “proportion” limits flexibility. Aim for standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” “rose,” and “fell,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple statements and more complex comparisons, including “whereas” and “While,” and most figures remain understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, particularly in verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “travelling to work was increased” uses an incorrect passive form, and “travelling to work and playing sports were contributed the same” is not grammatically well formed. “Working activity was made for the highest” also has an unclear structure. There are awkward article and preposition patterns in “in the year of 2008” and “travelling to work 2%.” Practise concise active constructions such as “The share of commuting rose to 7%” and ensure each list item has a clear verb or parallel structure.

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