Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the given pie chart,it illustrate the two charts of different years there is a pie chart of 1958 and other is the 2008 chart in which it make notice on the adults that how they spent their time in 1958 and in 2008 there are major changes in 1958 adults and 2008 adults.

In the pie chart of 1958 it shows that there is around 33%of adults how spent their day on work,and second is sleeping there around 32% adults who spent their day on sleeping,there are less percent of adults how going out with family and freinds,and other activites are like relaxing at home or travel to work which are at very least percent.

On the other hand,the pie chart of 2008 it shows the activites of adults.in the beggning we have work which is 42% and it increase 9% in 2008 as compare to 1958 and the other activity is sleeping which is 25% and it good because in 1958 it around 32% and other activites are mostly similar to each other one activity is increase that is playing sport.

In conclusion its shows that the mostly activites of the adults are similar as compare to both year pie chart,there is only one major change is that in 1958 adults don't have intrest in playing sports but it seem that the intrest of playing sports increase in 2008 adults.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two years and report several relevant figures, including work rising from 33% to 42% and sleeping falling from 32% to 25%. You also notice that sports appears in 2008. However, the response only partly summarises the charts: it omits the exact figures for most other activities and gives an inaccurate overview by saying activities are “mostly similar.” In fact, going out with friends or family drops sharply from 19% to 6%, while travelling to work rises from 2% to 7% and relaxing at home from 8% to 13%. The claim that adults had no interest in sports in 1958 is not supported; the chart simply does not show a sports category for that year. Select the main changes and compare them explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from the 1958 chart to 2008 and then to a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a shift. However, progression is limited because the paragraphs mostly describe one year at a time rather than grouping and comparing the main trends. Linking phrases are sometimes mechanical or unclear, as in “In the beginning,” and the conclusion repeats the idea of a major change without resolving the earlier claim that activities were mostly similar. Several sentences run together, making relationships between points harder to follow. Organise the body around comparisons—for example, rising activities and falling activities—and use clear sentence boundaries and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “pie chart,” “adults,” “work,” “sleeping,” and “increase,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with “activities” and “adults” appearing frequently, and some word choices are imprecise: “it make notice” does not clearly express what the charts show, while “it good” is unsuitable for describing a percentage change. Spelling errors such as “freinds,” “activites,” “beggning,” and “intrest” also make the writing less clear. Use accurate chart language and vary the verbs, for example, “accounted for,” “rose,” “declined,” and “represented.” Check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and comparisons, such as “it increase 9% in 2008 as compare to 1958,” but control is weak and errors occur frequently. Problems include subject–verb agreement (“it illustrate”), missing or incorrect articles and prepositions (“in the pie chart of 1958”), and faulty sentence construction (“there is around 33%of adults how spent their day on work”). Tense and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “it shows” alongside “it increase.” Punctuation is often missing after introductory phrases, and several sentences are joined without clear boundaries. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise short, accurate comparison patterns first, then combine them using clauses such as “while” and “whereas.”

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