Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts demonstrate percentages of the day spent by working adults from 1958 to 2008. The first chart giving information about how many percent of the day spend by working adults on various activities in 1958. The second shows information that is calculated in 2008.Both charts define changes that happend in many things with time.

The adults who going out with their friends or family was 19% in 1958 but these numbers decreased to 6% in 2008 . There are only 2% of adults that was traveling to work but with time these numbers increased to 7% in 2008. Furthermore in working acitivity there is 33% of adults who involve in this activity and with time these numbers increased to 42% in 2008. In addition 32% of adults doing sleep activity more but with time there is a change in record the numbers go to 25% in 2008.The last activity in that are mention in chart was relaxing at home.

In 1958, 8% of adults doing this activity but with time this number increased to

13% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report several accurate comparisons, including the fall in going out with friends or family from 19% to 6%, and the rises in working and relaxing at home. However, the response only partially fulfils the task because it lacks a clear overview of the main changes. The opening mostly restates the chart description, while “Both charts define changes” does not identify the most important pattern. You also omit the 2008 figure for playing sports, a category shown only in that year, and do not clearly compare the relative prominence of activities. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview—for example, that working became the largest share while sleeping and socialising declined—and then select key figures to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response introduces the charts and then reports several activity comparisons, with relaxing at home discussed at the end. However, progression is not consistently clear, and the first paragraph repeats the task rather than establishing a useful overview. The sequence of figures feels like a list, and linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “In addition” do not always clarify how the information relates. The final sentence also ends abruptly after the 2008 figure. Use a clear overview paragraph followed by a logically grouped comparison paragraph, and connect changes with precise contrasts such as “whereas” or “by comparison.” This would make the relationships between the figures easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart’s activities and describe basic changes, using terms such as “decreased,” “increased,” and “relaxing at home.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning awkward: “these numbers” refers unclearly to percentages, “in working acitivity” is not a natural phrase, and “doing sleep activity” is unsuitable for this context. There are also spelling errors, including “happend” and “acitivity.” Use standard chart language consistently, such as “the proportion spent on,” “accounted for,” and “rose/fell to.” Check spelling and choose precise terms for people’s time use rather than describing activities as something adults “do” in each sentence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences with contrast, for example, “The adults who going out with their friends or family was 19% … but these numbers decreased to 6%.” However, the limited sentence patterns are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries can make the text difficult to read. Examples include “who going out,” “There are only 2% … that was traveling,” and “32% of adults doing sleep activity.” The opening also contains an incomplete construction: “The first chart giving information…” Several sentences run together, as in “in 2008.Both charts,” while spacing around punctuation is inconsistent. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and accurate past-tense reporting, then proofread each sentence for agreement and punctuation.

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