Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts compare percentage of functioning youngsters in 1958 and 2008 of specific countries.

Overall, it is clear that active workers hold the largest portion in 1958 and 2008. While ratio of workers who travel from one place to another increase in 2008.

Biggest portion of chart illustrates that ratio proportion of workers in 1958 goes up in 2008. In addition adults who waste their time in sleeping are lesser in 2008. Furthermore, youngsters who stay at home and spend mojority of their time in relaxing are rise in 2008 as compared to 1958.

Not only but also spending time with friends or relatives fall down in 2008 as adults prefer less attention for outgoing. The sportsman adults stay constant in both years and dramatically shows no change. With passage of time adults who go far away from their home for job is increased in 2008. On the other hand, youngsters do not like to went away from their home for doing job.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant broad trends, including the rise in working time and commuting, and the fall in sleeping and socialising. However, the response only partially reports the chart: it gives no figures, and the overview that workers have the largest share in both years overlooks that sleeping was almost equal to work in 1958. There is also a factual error in saying sports participation stayed constant; sports appears only in 2008, at 7%. The description of socialising as adults giving it “less attention” adds an unsupported explanation. To make the account more complete and accurate, select the main changes, support them with key percentages, and avoid interpreting reasons that the charts do not show.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details, and it uses linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “On the other hand.” However, the progression between points is not consistently clear: the final paragraph shifts repeatedly between socialising, sport, commuting, and working without a clear comparison pattern. Some links are inaccurate or awkward, particularly “Not only but also,” which does not connect the ideas grammatically, and “On the other hand” introduces a claim that conflicts with the earlier statement that commuting increased. Group the activities by rising and falling shares, and use straightforward comparisons to make the sequence easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary related to the topic, including “portion,” “relaxing,” “travelling,” and “dramatically.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “functioning youngsters,” “active workers hold the largest portion,” and “adults who waste their time in sleeping” are unsuitable for describing the chart. “Ratio proportion” is redundant, while “sportsman adults” does not accurately name the category. Use precise chart language such as “working adults,” “share,” “spent sleeping,” and “the proportion who travelled to work.” Check spelling as well, including “mojority,” and avoid adding evaluative wording such as “waste.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including a contrast beginning “While” and a sentence starting “Not only but also,” but these structures are often faulty. For example, “While ratio of workers who travel … increase” is an incomplete clause and has incorrect subject–verb agreement; “the sportsman adults stay constant” also uses an incorrect verb form for the intended meaning. Other errors include “are rise,” “do not like to went,” and missing articles in phrases such as “in 1958.” These frequent problems make some relationships between ideas unclear. Build accuracy first with complete comparative sentences, such as “The share spent working rose from 33% to 42%,” then practise combining them with correctly formed contrast clauses.

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