Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given both pie compare that, how adults working in a particular country and spent their free time on different activities between 1958 to 2008. It also measured by percentages.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that, adults was spend a huge time to their workplace. In addition, they waste second highest time to sleep. A small number of time used for travelling to work.

Now looking at more details, in 1958, most of the adults expend 33% of time for work while 42% accounted by 2008. On the other hand, they uesd 32% of time for sleeping in 1958, beside that this proportion were decreased in 2008 at 25%.

However, In 1958, used at 19% of time to going out with friends or family whereas in 2008 this rate was significantley rose at 13%.

Furthermore, it was noticable that, relaxing at home and traveling to work was increased at 5%,6% respectively in this time period.

Moreover, in 2008 adults used 7% time for palying sports.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant comparisons, including work rising from 33% to 42%, sleep falling from 32% to 25%, and the 2008 figure for sports. However, the overview is not fully accurate: work was the largest category in both years, but sleeping was not the second-largest in 2008, when relaxing at home and travelling to work each accounted for 13% and 7%, respectively, while going out fell to 6%. The statement that going out “rose at 13%” misreports a decline from 19% to 6%, and the final comparison gives increases of 5% and 6% rather than the actual changes of 5 and 5 percentage points. Select the main trends accurately and distinguish percentages from percentage-point changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs presenting details. This gives the reader some organisation, and linking expressions such as “On the other hand” and “Furthermore” signal comparisons. However, progression is uneven because the overview’s claim about sleeping as the second-largest activity is not supported by the later figures, and the final paragraphs list details without grouping the categories into clear trends. Some connectors are also used mechanically or do not express the intended relationship; “However” introduces a comparison rather than a genuine contrast, while “Moreover” adds a separate detail. Group the increases together and the decreases together, and use linking phrases that accurately show how the information relates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “decreased,” and the reader can generally identify the activities being compared. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “waste second highest time,” “expend 33% of time,” and “this rate was significantly rose.” Spelling errors, including “uesd,” “significantley,” “noticable,” and “palying,” also make the writing less controlled. Aim for precise chart language: say that adults “spent” a proportion of their day on an activity, that a figure “rose” or “fell,” and that a category “accounted for” a share. Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “whereas.” However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. For example, “The given both pie compare that” lacks a workable sentence structure, while “adults was spend” has incorrect agreement and verb form. In “this proportion were decreased,” the subject and verb do not agree and the passive construction is faulty; “this rate was significantly rose” also combines incompatible verb forms. Articles, prepositions, and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “33% of time for work” and the comma after “seen.” Build accurate basic clauses first, then add comparisons with correctly formed past-tense verbs and consistent subject–verb agreement.

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