Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrated how working adults in particular country spent their time on various activities between 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the proportion of working hours and sleeping was the highest in 1958, whereas in 2008, the percentage of working was increased then previous figure and going out with friends/ family had least participates.

In 1958, the percentage of day spent by working adults was the highest at 33% and people spent their time on sleep was quite similar (32%) to working adults. Furthermore, the proportion of going out with friends/ family at just 19, followed by 8% from people who relaxing at home. Playing sports and travelling to work represented at 6% and 2% respectively.

In contrast, the proportion of working adults increased to 42% in 2008, while sleeping dropped by 25% and took second highest position as similar to pervious figure. Moreover, relaxing at home represented at 13%. The participants of playing sports and travelling to work had spent similar time at just 7%, however, the remaining and the lowest proportion shared by going out with friends/family at just 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main changes: working rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and going out with friends or family declines substantially. The response also includes relevant figures for the other activities. However, the overview is not fully accurate: working and sleeping were the two largest categories in 1958, rather than working hours and sleeping being “the highest” as a single feature, and the 2008 overview would be clearer if it highlighted the overall shift toward work and away from socialising. There are also factual errors: playing sports was not shown in 1958, and going out was 19%, not 6%, in that year. These inaccuracies and the uneven development of the overview limit the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear four-paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to a separate account of each year. This makes the comparison easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “In contrast,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships between details. The organisation is generally logical, though some connections are awkward or unclear. For example, “sleeping dropped by 25%” could mean a reduction of 25%, rather than a fall to 25%, and “the remaining and the lowest proportion shared by” makes the final comparison difficult to process. The overview also combines several points without clearly distinguishing the main trends. More precise referencing and less formulaic linking would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “represented,” “increased,” and “dropped,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the highest in 1958,” “least participates,” and “people who relaxing at home.” “Working hours” also changes the chart’s meaning: it shows the share of the day spent working. Repetition of “proportion” and “percentage” further limits flexibility. Aim for precise chart language and natural collocations, for example, “accounted for,” “the smallest share,” and “spent time relaxing at home.” These issues are noticeable but the main information remains understandable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including contrast clauses with “whereas” and “while,” and most of the intended comparisons can be understood. However, errors in sentence construction and verb forms recur. Examples include “the percentage of working was increased then previous figure,” “people spent their time on sleep,” and “the proportion … represented at 13%.” Articles and agreement also need attention: write “in a particular country” and avoid treating “the percentage” as plural. Some sentences become difficult to interpret, especially “the remaining and the lowest proportion shared by…” Use a reliable pattern such as “X accounted for Y%” or “the figure for X rose to Y%,” then check tense, articles, and sentence completeness.

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