Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Pie charts compares the times expenditure of working adults in a specific country in 1958 and 2008.

overall wroking time ramined the most post proprtion time spent in 1958 and 2008.

Travelling to work cosument least proprtion of time in both 1958and 2008.

Time spent at work increased from 1958 to 2008, while slleping time percentage decresed from 1958 to 2008.

In 1958 time spent working and sleeping were almost same just having on percent differnce respectively and remained the most time consuming in working adults.Time consumed for travelling to work is the least recorded in 1958 which is 2% only in 1958, while realxing at home was just 8%.

In 2008 time spent working increased to 42% from 33% in 1958,and reamined the most time spending portion, while sleeping time at 25% remained second despite showing decrease as compared to 1958,time consumed by commuting to work increased to 7% of total time in 2008 .In 2008 going out with friends and family was the section with least time amongst all at 6%, relaxing at home incresed in 2008 to 13% as compared to 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: working takes the largest share in both years and rises from 33% to 42%, while sleeping falls from 32% to 25%. You also report several relevant figures, including commuting, relaxing at home and socialising, and your overview gives the reader a useful summary. This covers the task well, though some features are less fully developed: the 2008 figure for sports (7%) is omitted, and the comparison of socialising is not made explicit (19% to 6%). The statement that commuting is the smallest category in both years is inaccurate, since in 2008 going out is lower at 6%, while commuting and sports are both 7%. More precise selection and comparison of all key changes would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about 1958 and then 2008. This helps the reader follow the broad comparison. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview repeats points that are then restated in the detail paragraphs, and several ideas are crowded into long sentences, especially the final paragraph. Linking is also limited and sometimes mechanical, with repeated use of “while” and “as compared to.” Paragraphing could more clearly separate the overview from the two years’ details, and comparisons between years could be grouped together rather than reported in a sequence of separate observations. These changes would make the organisation more purposeful and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “increased,” “decreased,” “commuting” and “time spent,” so the main information is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are unnatural, such as “times expenditure,” “most time spending portion” and “least proportion of time.” Spelling errors are also noticeable, including “wroking,” “slleping,” “decresed” and “incresed,” which detract from clarity and control. Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “share of the day,” “accounted for” and “the smallest proportion.” Proofreading spelling and avoiding repeated use of “time spent” would help make the vocabulary more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including comparisons joined with “while” and clauses such as “despite showing decrease.” The reader can usually understand the intended trends, but sentence control is inconsistent. The opening lacks an article and verb agreement (“Pie charts compares”), and the overview has an incomplete or unclear construction (“working time remained the most proportion”). In longer sentences, punctuation and clause boundaries are often weak; for example, the final paragraph joins several comparisons with commas, making the relationships harder to follow. There are also errors with articles and sentence structure, as in “showing decrease.” Use shorter, complete sentences where needed, check subject–verb agreement, and punctuate comparisons carefully while continuing to practise varied sentence forms.

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