Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided pie charts illustrate the percentage of working adults spent time in a particular country over the period of 1958 and 2008.

In general, youth spend their most of time in working in both years, while time spend in sleeping accounted for 32% nad 25% over both years. The most feature is that in 2008 an avtivity of playing sports was also exits.

Looking in the details, it is clear that in 1958 workers invested their most of time in sleeping and working because they contributed highest share of 32% and 33% respectively.In addition pickning activity had the percentage of 19%, whereas percentages for time consumed in travelling for work and relaxing at home made up the least share.

In contrast, over the period of 2008 time spend in travelling and playing games were similar in share, while pickning avtivity comprised of 7% of the total. Time utilized in working and sleeping constituted for highest proportion of 42% and 25%.Moreover,time used in relaxing at home represented 13%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important features, including the rise in working time from 33% to 42%, the fall in sleeping from 32% to 25%, and the appearance of sports in 2008. However, the overview is unclear and includes an inaccurate claim: working was not the largest category in both years, since sleeping was marginally higher in 1958. Some comparisons are also incomplete. For example, you say travelling and playing sports were similar in 2008, but omit that both were 7%, and you do not give the 1958 figures for travelling or relaxing. The description of going out with friends and family is repeatedly called “pickning,” making this key category difficult to identify. A clearer overview and accurate, selective comparisons would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “In contrast” help signal a comparison. However, progression is sometimes weakened by unclear references and mechanical linking. For instance, “over both years” does not clearly connect to the figures that follow, while “whereas” introduces a comparison without specifying the missing percentages. The final paragraph also shifts between categories without a consistent order. Grouping the largest changes first, then the smaller categories, and using precise references to each activity would make the organisation and cohesion more effective.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary for describing proportions, including “accounted for,” “contributed,” “share,” and “constituted.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the data hard to follow. “Pickning activity” appears to mean going out with friends or family, but it is not a recognisable expression; “playing games” also changes the chart’s label, which is “playing sports.” Phrases such as “time utilized in working” and “made up the least share” are awkward collocations. Spelling errors, including “avtivity” and “exits,” further reduce clarity. Prefer accurate chart labels and straightforward expressions such as “the proportion spent working” or “accounted for 13%.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple statements and some longer structures, such as the sentence beginning “In contrast,” and the clause introduced by “whereas.” However, grammatical control is uneven, particularly in verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “youth spend their most of time in working” has problems with the subject and verb pattern, while “time spend in sleeping accounted for” needs a passive form such as “time spent sleeping.” The opening sentence also incorrectly makes “working adults” the subject of “spent.” Punctuation is inconsistent: there is no space after full stops in “respectively.In” and “25%.Moreover,” and the first sentence of the overview is difficult to parse. Check sentence boundaries and use complete, accurate verb patterns.

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