Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chats illustrate the information about the mature people in the particular country that how they spent their day time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working was major priority in both years, and its proportion was increased at the end of the period. Sleeping was second major interest, while playing sports and traveling to work were least prominent.

Turning to the most favorite activity of the individuals which was working, increased to 42% in 2008, from 33% in 1958. Moreover, the figure of relaxing at home was 8% in 1958, increased to 13% in 2008. Traveling to work contributed 2% in 1998, and its proportion rose to 7% in 2008. Meanwhile, the figure of playing sports remaind constant.

On the other hand, although in terms of percentage sleeping had the share of 32% in 1958, it decreased to 25% in 2008. Going out with friends or family contributed 19% in this regard, in1958, but the percentage experienced down drift by reaching to 6% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important comparisons accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and time spent going out drops from 19% to 6%. The overview also recognises working as the largest category in both years. However, some details are incomplete or inaccurate. You say travelling to work was 2% in 1998, although the chart gives 2% for 1958, and the statement that sports “remained constant” is unsupported: sports appears only in the 2008 chart, at 7%. The overview also calls sleeping the second-largest activity without noting that going out was second in 1958. Covering the sports figure and making the overview more precise would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs comparing the figures. The contrastive phrases “Moreover” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships between the data, and the main categories are grouped in a generally understandable way. Some connections are less effective, however. “Turning to the most favorite activity … increased” leaves the reader to infer that the percentage, rather than the activity, increased, while “in this regard” has an unclear reference. The final paragraph also ends without a concluding comparison, and the sports detail is placed awkwardly in the earlier paragraph. Use clearer references and organise the figures consistently by increases and decreases or by category to strengthen progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing proportions and change, including “proportion,” “contributed,” “decreased,” and “rose.” These choices make the main comparisons understandable. However, several expressions are unnatural or imprecise for an academic chart summary: “mature people,” “day time,” “major priority,” and “down drift” do not fit the context well. “Most favorite” is also redundant, and “remained constant” is not an appropriate description of the sports data. Spelling slips such as “pie chats” and “remaind” further reduce accuracy. Aim for standard chart language such as “working adults,” “share,” “accounted for,” and “declined,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “although” and comparisons using “from … to …”. The overall meaning is usually clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the information … that how they spent” has an incorrect clause structure, and “working … increased” needs a subject such as “the proportion of time spent working.” In “was 8% …, increased to 13%,” the second verb needs a clearer grammatical link, such as “and rose to.” There are also errors in articles and spacing, as in “in1958.” Practise forming accurate comparison sentences and subordinate clauses; this will help you retain variety while improving control.

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