Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The tables below display how working adults in a specific nation allocated their time to different activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is immediately apparent that the largest share in 1958 and 2008 was on working, while the smallest figure in 1958 was travelling to work. However, this figure inceased slightly in 2008.

In 1958, working adults spent 33% of their time on working. Followed by 32% on sleeping and 19% on picnic with friends and family. The smallest figure in 1958 was travelling to work and stood at 2%. Playing sports throughout the given period remained almost the same .

In 2008, working activity took the largest proportion which was 42% and sleeping dropped slightly to 25% compared to 1958. They spent 13% on relaxing at home compared to only 8% in 1958. In this period, the time on travelling to work increased to 7%, while going out with friends declined slightly to only 6%. So, there was a dramatic increase in working, relaxing and going outside with friend and family over the given period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern that working takes the largest share in both years and correctly report several key figures, including work (33% to 42%), sleep (32% to 25%), and travel (2% to 7%). However, the overview is incomplete and some details are inaccurate or unclear. The claim that travel “increased slightly” understates the change, while the final sentence says going out increased even though it fell from 19% to 6%. You also mention sports as remaining almost the same, but the chart shows it only in 2008, at 7%. A stronger response would give a clear overview of the major rises and falls, accurately compare socialising, and avoid unsupported claims about sports.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. This makes the information easy to locate, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In 1958,” and “In 2008” help guide the reader. However, progression is weakened by the contradiction between saying socialising declined and later describing an increase in going out. The sentence “Playing sports throughout the given period remained almost the same” is also disconnected from the 1958 details and does not fit the chart data. Some sentence openings and comparisons feel mechanical. Grouping the main increases together and the decreases together, with consistent references to both years, would create a more logical comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task vocabulary, including “largest share,” “proportion,” “dropped,” and “increased,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts to vary wording rather than repeat “percentage” throughout. However, some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “picnic with friends and family” does not match the chart’s category, and “working activity took the largest proportion” is awkward. “Dramatic increase” is not suitable for the fall in going out, while “slightly” understates the travel change. There are spelling and form slips, including “inceased” and “friend” where the plural is needed. Use precise chart labels and choose trend vocabulary that reflects both direction and scale.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the comparisons remain understandable. For example, “sleeping dropped slightly to 25% compared to 1958” communicates a change, while the sentence beginning “In this period” combines several related details. Some grammatical errors and awkward constructions remain. “Followed by 32% on sleeping” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence, and “spent 33% of their time on working” uses an unnatural grammatical pattern. The final sentence also has a number-agreement problem in “going outside with friend and family.” Improve control by writing complete sentences, using patterns such as “spent 33% of their time working,” and checking articles, plurals, and punctuation.

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