Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts demonstrates in what way working people in a specific country devote their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall,it is observed that in both the years working proportion is the dominant source.Whereas,travelling to work and going out with family and friends were least percentage in the given period,relaxing at home shows rose in second year.

An analysis of the image reveals that in 1958 maximum percentage was working 33% ,with sleeping accounting for 32% which is second largest part.Going out with family, friends minimum percent 19%.Although relaxing at home and travelling to work dropped to least quotas 8% and 2%.

On the other hand in 2008, topmost piece was working is 42% slepping were second proportion at 25% ,relaxing at home ratio is 13% it grow when compares with 1958 .In contrast travelling to work and playing sports relatively equal at 7%.and least slice accounted for going out with family,friends is 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern that working took the largest share in both years, and you report several key figures accurately, including work (33% to 42%), sleep (32% to 25%), and time with friends or family (19% to 6%). The comparison between the years and the overview show that you understand the charts. However, the overview is not fully precise: travelling and socialising were not both among the smallest categories in both years, and sports appears only in 2008. The statement that relaxing at home “shows rose” is also unclear, although the figures later indicate its increase from 8% to 13%. To strengthen the response, make the overall changes explicit and compare the categories that rose, fell, or appeared in only one year more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of 1958 and 2008. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal the shift between years. Some connections are less effective, however. The overview combines several trends in one sentence, while the final paragraph lists figures without consistently showing how they relate to the earlier year. Punctuation and spacing also make transitions harder to follow, as in “7%.and least slice”. Use clearer sentence boundaries and organise each comparison around a trend—for example, increases in work and commuting, followed by decreases in sleep and socialising—to make progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion”, “accounting for”, “dominant”, and “slice”, and you attempt a range of ways to describe shares and comparisons. However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise, such as “dominant source”, “least quotas”, and “topmost piece”. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “slepping” and “grow”, which reduce the accuracy of the description. Some phrases, such as “maximum percentage was working”, are understandable but not idiomatic for reporting data. Aim for a smaller set of precise collocations—“accounted for the largest share”, “the smallest proportion”, and “rose to”—and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast introduced by “Although” and the comparison “when compares with 1958”. However, control is inconsistent, and several sentences contain errors that make the relationships between figures less clear. For example, “The pie charts demonstrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “working proportion is the dominant source” lacks a natural grammatical construction. In “topmost piece was working is 42%”, the sentence structure is faulty, and “relaxing at home ratio is 13% it grow” joins clauses without correct punctuation or verb forms. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate past-tense forms when describing changes between the two years.

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