Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

This pie chart illustrstes that how employed adults in a specific country allocated their daily time across several activities in two diffrent years: 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working and sleeping contributed to the largest shares of the day in both years. Over the 50 years, adult spent noticeably more time working, travelling to work and relaxing at home, while time spent sleeping and socializing outside the home experienced a marked decline. Additionally, playing sport emerged as a distinct new daily activity in 2008.

In 1958, working and sleeping dominated the daily routine, comprising 33% and 32% of the day, respectively. By 2008, the work related time subsequently increased from 33% in 1958 to 42%, dominating the pie chart. Whereas, time allocated for sleeping experienced a maeked decline from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008.

Moreover, time allocated for travelling experienced an increase of 5% from being 2% on the chart in 1958 to 7% in 2008. Looking at the percentage of time allocated for social activities like going out with family and friends, the percentages illustrate a decline from 19% in 1958 to just 6% in 2008. Additionally, playing sports is introduced as new activity in 2008 showing percentage of 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response selects the main features and gives a clear overview: work and sleep are identified as the largest categories, and the contrasting rises in work, commuting and home relaxation versus falls in sleep and socialising are accurately described. The figures cited—such as work increasing from 33% to 42%, sleep falling from 32% to 25%, and going out declining from 19% to 6%—match the charts. You also note that sport appears in 2008. This is a well-supported account of the key changes. To make the reporting more precise, clarify that the 2008 chart includes six activities, and avoid the slightly imprecise phrase “an increase of 5%” for commuting; it rises by five percentage points.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is organised effectively into an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs. The progression from the overall pattern to specific comparisons is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover” and “Additionally” help signal relationships between points. This gives the report a coherent structure. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and “Whereas” begins a sentence fragment after a full stop. The repeated pattern “time allocated for…” also makes the final paragraph less fluid. For stronger cohesion, combine related comparisons more naturally and use clearer referencing—for example, group the increases in commuting and home relaxation together, then contrast them with the decline in social outings.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

There is an adequate range of vocabulary for describing chart data, including “dominated,” “allocated,” “marked decline” and “emerged as a distinct new daily activity.” These choices help communicate the main trends, and the meaning remains clear despite some inaccuracies. However, several spelling errors—“illustrstes,” “diffrent” and “maeked”—reduce accuracy. Some collocations are also awkward: “work related time” is less natural than “time spent working,” while “playing sports is introduced as new activity” is imprecise. Aim for accurate, conventional chart-reporting language and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “share,” “proportion” and “percentage points” would also help you describe the data consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the overview sentence beginning “Over the 50 years” and comparisons with “from…to…”. Most relationships between the figures are understandable, and the response communicates its message without serious difficulty. Some grammatical errors remain, however. The opening clause “illustrstes that how…” has an unnecessary “that”; “adult spent” needs plural agreement; and “Whereas” is used to start an incomplete sentence. In “showing percentage of 7%,” an article is needed before “percentage.” Review clause construction, agreement and articles, and punctuate contrast structures carefully. These corrections would make the varied sentence forms more consistently controlled.

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