Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided pie chart illustrates the proportion of time that working memebers of society of specific country spent on 6 distinct activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, work consumed most of the time of day of individuals in both years and increased over the period. In contrast, the amount of time spent sleeping and going out with friends and family declined over the years. while traveling to work and and relaxation at home increased.

in 1958, work utilize 33% of working adults time of the day, making it the highest time consuming activity. however, time spent on traveling to work was least time consuming activity, taking only 2% of time. Sleeping occupied 32% of time and remained the seconed highest category and going out with friends took 19% time of day.

By 2008, the proportion of time spent on work increased to 42% and remained the highest time consuming activity while, time for going out with friends and family and sleeping decreased to 6% and 25% repectively. In contrast, the percentage of time spent of traveling to work and leisure at house increased by 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall pattern accurately: work took the largest share in both years and rose, while sleeping and socialising declined. The figures you give for work, sleep, socialising and commuting in 1958, and for work, sleep and socialising in 2008, match the chart. However, the comparison is not fully developed: you say travel and relaxation increased but give neither 2008 figure, and you omit the 7% share for playing sports in 2008. Also, the overview says relaxation increased without clearly distinguishing it from travel, and the 2008 paragraph does not report the actual changes for either category. Include the key figures and make the new sports category explicit to cover the data more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for the two years. The progression from the broad trends to year-specific details is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast” and “By 2008” help guide the reader. This already provides a coherent arrangement, but cohesion is not consistently controlled: “In contrast” is used for several different relationships, and the final sentence groups travel and relaxation together without explaining their separate figures. There are also distracting sentence-boundary and capitalisation issues, such as “while” beginning the overview sentence in lowercase. Use transitions more precisely and connect each comparison directly to its data.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “occupied,” “declined” and “increased,” so the main comparisons are understandable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “highest time consuming activity,” although this collocation is awkward and repeated. Several word-choice, spelling and form errors reduce precision: “memebers,” “seconed,” and “repectively” are misspelled, while “leisure at house” is not a natural description of relaxing at home. Prefer concise, accurate chart language—for example, “accounted for the largest share” and “time spent relaxing at home.” Vary repeated phrases and check spelling carefully to make the vocabulary more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “while” and clauses such as “making it the highest…”; meaning is generally clear. However, some grammatical errors remain. In “work utilize 33%,” the verb form and tense do not fit the past-time description; “working adults time” needs a possessive form; and “the least time consuming activity” requires an article and a more suitable grammatical construction. The overview also has a sentence fragment beginning “while,” and the comma in “activity while, time…” interrupts the clause incorrectly. Capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent. Review past-tense reporting, possessives, articles and sentence boundaries, while retaining the range of structures you are attempting.

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