Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrate the percentages of day that spent by working our young on different activities from 1958 to 2008
Overall, the most time spend on working and it was increase to the coming year, while the least time spend on travelling to work. which was slightly rose in 2008
To begain with, young individual spend a lot of time on doing some work in 1958 at 33% followed by it increased 42% in 2008. Futhermore sleeping near to the working at 32% it was decline in 2008 at 25% . However the least time spend on travelling for work just a tiny in 1958 it also a tiny in 2008 at 7%
In constrat, going out with families or friends was at 19% in 1958 followed by it gradually decline at 6% in 2008. However relaxing at home stood at 8% in 1958. which minor increased in 2008 at 13% and the laste activitie spend days in playing sports was at 7% in 2008
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify several important patterns accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and time spent going out drops from 19% to 6%. You also include the increases in relaxing at home and travelling to work, plus the appearance of sports in 2008. However, the overview is not fully reliable: travelling was the smallest category in 1958, but in 2008 it was tied with sports at 7%, so calling it the least is incomplete. The overview also does not clearly summarise the major shift from socialising towards work. Some comparisons are listed without explaining their significance, leaving the main features only partly developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs. Grouping work and sleep together, then discussing socialising and home relaxation, gives the reader some organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and several linking expressions do not show a clear relationship. For example, “In constrat” introduces figures without a meaningful contrast, while repeated “However” and “followed by” make the connections feel mechanical. The overview’s sentence about travelling is also separated by a full stop and begins with a lower-case “which,” disrupting the flow. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each comparison directly to the relevant change.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentages,” “decline,” “increased” and “stood at,” and the activity categories are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning awkward: “the most time spend on working,” “a tiny,” and “the laste activitie spend days” are not natural ways to describe proportions. Spelling errors such as “begain,” “Futhermore” and “constrat” are noticeable. Aim for precise reporting language and check word forms and spelling. For example, use “accounted for” or “made up” for proportions, and “rose slightly” rather than “was slightly rose.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
There are attempts to combine information, but sentence structures are mostly simple or are joined in ways that produce frequent grammatical errors. The opening phrase, “percentages of day that spent,” lacks a clear subject and correct verb structure. Other examples include “it was increase,” “sleeping near to the working,” and “which minor increased,” where verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. Punctuation also causes problems: “In 1958. which…” creates a fragment, and several sentences run together without clear boundaries. These errors sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to follow. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The proportion of time spent working increased from 33% to 42%.”
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