Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of the day spent by working adults in six activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the percentage of time they spent working is relatively high in both years.

In 1958 the percentage of time spent in sleeping was 32% compared to 25% in 2008. The proportion of the time spent in working was high in both years. In 1958 it accounted for 33% while the percentage incresed slightly to 42% in 2008.

In 1958, going out with family was the third most loved activity which recorded a percentage of 19% however , in 2008 the percentage drastically dropped to 6%. Travelling to work and relaxing at home had lowest percentage in 1958. In this year, they recorded 2% and 8% respectively while the percentage was at 7%and 13% in 2008. Playing sports was not accounted for in 1958 however, in 2008the percentage was recorded at 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main comparison that working took a substantial share in both years and accurately report its rise from 33% to 42%. The figures for sleeping, socialising, travel, relaxing at home and sport are also generally reported correctly, and you note the sharp fall in going out. However, the overview is limited to work being high; it would be more informative to summarise the broader shifts, such as increased work and commuting alongside reduced sleep and socialising. The phrase “third most loved activity” is not a clear description of the chart ranking, and the account does not explicitly highlight that sport appears only in 2008. A more selective overview and clearer comparisons would make the key features more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and a body that compares the two years. Information is mostly grouped by activity, and linking phrases such as “while” and “however” help show contrasts. However, the overview is very brief and does not guide the reader through the main pattern of change. Some connections are awkward or unclear, particularly “Travelling to work and relaxing at home had lowest percentage in 1958. In this year,” where the reference is repetitive and the comparison could be joined more smoothly. In the final paragraph, several figures are packed into one sentence. Use clearer topic grouping and more precise referencing to create a steadier progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “recorded” and “dropped,” so the data remains understandable. There are also attempts at more descriptive wording, such as “drastically dropped.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural for a chart report: “third most loved activity” suggests preference rather than the share of time, and “the percentage was at 7%” is less natural than “stood at 7%.” Spelling and spacing slips, including “incresed” and “2008the,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, neutral reporting language and check spelling and word boundaries during proofreading.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “compared to,” “while” and “however.” Most meanings are clear, and the figures are generally attached to the correct years. Some grammatical and punctuation errors remain. For example, “Travelling to work and relaxing at home had lowest percentage” needs an article (“the lowest percentage”), while “the percentage incresed slightly to 42%” contains a spelling issue rather than a grammar problem. Commas are also misplaced in “19% however , in 2008,” and spacing around punctuation is inconsistent. Work on articles, sentence boundaries and punctuation while retaining the comparative structures you already attempt.

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