Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given pic charts compare the working adults of a particular country spendt their time in 1958 and 2008.Overall it is clear that in 1958 to 2008 working had increasd in adults on various acticities.The decline activities had sleeping.The low percentages had going out with friends , family,and travelling to work.

In 1958 33% of the working was highest of adults on various activies. Distantly followed by the sleeping had second adults various activites at around 32 %.The going out with friends and family had at around 19 % . in the 1958 low percentages adults on various activities travelling to work around 2 %.

In context of 2008 working had grow on adults of various activites at around 42 % .The sleeping had at around 25 % and relaxing had at around 13 %.The lowests percentages od adults on various activities playing sports and travelling to work had same spend bu working at 7%. The going out with friends and family had at around 6 %.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall changes: working takes a larger share in 2008, while sleeping and socialising take smaller shares, and you include several relevant figures. However, the overview is unclear in places, especially “The decline activities had sleeping,” and it does not clearly summarise the full pattern. Some comparisons are also incomplete: for example, sports appears only in 2008, but this is not explicitly contrasted with 1958, and the 2008 figures for travel and sports are grouped confusingly. To strengthen the response, state the key trends clearly in the overview, then compare the largest and smallest categories across both years with accurate, direct descriptions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening overview followed by separate paragraphs for 1958 and 2008. This gives the information some organisation, and the years provide a simple framework for comparison. However, progression within sentences is often difficult to follow, as in “The lowest percentages … playing sports and travelling to work had same spend bu working at 7%.” Connections between ideas are also limited, and phrases such as “In context of 2008” do not clearly signal the relationship between the figures. Use clearer topic sentences and link comparisons directly—for example, contrast the rise in working with the fall in sleeping—while keeping each sentence focused on one or two related figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary includes relevant activity labels such as “sleeping,” “travelling to work,” and “going out with friends and family,” so the reader can identify the chart categories. However, the range is limited and several repeated or inaccurate expressions make the report hard to read. Phrases such as “adults on various activities” and “working had grow” are not natural ways to describe proportions, while spelling errors including “spendt,” “increasd,” and “activies” reduce accuracy. Aim to use precise chart language consistently, such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “the proportion of time spent,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, which sometimes obscures the intended meaning. For example, “The decline activities had sleeping” lacks a clear grammatical relationship, and “33% of the working was highest” does not form an accurate comparison. There are also recurring problems with verb forms and sentence boundaries, as in “working had grow” and the run-on opening where “2008.Overall” has no space after the full stop. Build reliable sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Working accounted for 33% in 1958 and rose to 42% in 2008.” Then check articles, agreement, and punctuation.

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