Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrates that, how the new generation workers spend their time in the year of 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the individuals spend most of their time in working which is gradually rose in 2008. Whereas, the sleeping time is reduced in 2008. Thecontribution in all other activities are very minor.

In 1958, the workers spend most of their time in working and sleeping which contributes 33% and 32% respectivily. The other major chunk of their time, they prefer to spend it with their friends and family for going out which is 19%. While the remaining time is distributed in travelling to work and relaxing at home.

In 2008, the empolyers spend most of their time in working and sleeping which is 42%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad pattern that work takes the largest share in 2008 and that sleeping declines, and you accurately report the 1958 figures for work, sleep and socialising. However, the response addresses the charts only partially: the 2008 account stops after giving the working figure, leaving its other categories and comparisons unreported. The overview also says all other activities are “very minor,” although socialising was 19% in 1958, and it does not capture the rise in commuting or relaxing at home, nor the appearance of sports in 2008. The response is also below the required 150 words. To develop the summary, cover both years, select the main increases and decreases, and give the relevant figures without listing every detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs beginning “In 1958” and “In 2008.” This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the progression is incomplete because the final paragraph ends after one figure, so the comparison between years is not carried through. Linking is also limited and sometimes awkward: “Whereas” begins a fragment, while “While” introduces a sentence that does not clearly complete the contrast. The overview’s “all other activities” is not clearly supported by the details that follow. Build a complete paragraph for each year or group the categories by change, and use linking words only where the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “working,” “sleeping,” “travelling to work,” and “distributed,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data. “New generation workers” is not supported by the task, “contribution” is an awkward label for time spent, and “major chunk” is informal. There are also spelling errors such as “respectivily” and “empolyers,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, neutral reporting language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe percentages as the “proportion of the day spent” on an activity, and use “share” or “figure” rather than “chunk.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer structures, such as “In 1958, the workers spend most of their time in working and sleeping,” but grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening contains an unnecessary comma after “that,” and “which is gradually rose” combines incompatible verb forms. Present-tense forms are also used where past reporting is needed (“workers spend”), and “The contribution … are” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is incomplete, and the final sentence is unfinished, limiting the range of complete structures. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete comparisons, for example: “The proportion spent working rose from 33% to 42%.”

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