Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The both pie chart illustrates the proportion of working adults in a specific country with average usage of their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, majority of the adults are accounted in working and sleeping categories in 1958, while the proportion of working adults in both activities are moderately increased and fewest contribution in playing sport during 2008.

In 1958, a large portion of adults spend their day in during working and sleeping, accounted for 33 percent and 32% respectively. a tiny portion around 2% is comprised by the category "travelling to work". fewer adults are chosen to going out with their homies and family, around a 19% of total activities.

In 2008, sleeping category are shown downward trend with 32% in 1958 to 25% in contrast , adults are improved their proportion about 11% in five decade. similarly, working adults towards playing sports and hangout with friends and families accounted for 7% and 6% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant figures, including working and sleeping in 1958 and the fall in sleeping from 32% to 25%. However, the response only partially summarises the charts: it does not clearly compare the full range of activities across both years, and the overview is unclear. The claim that the proportions in both working and sleeping “moderately increased” is inaccurate, since sleeping decreased, while working rose from 33% to 42%. The 2008 discussion also omits relaxing at home and travelling to work, and does not report the 13% and 7% figures. Playing sports is mentioned, but its absence from the 1958 chart is not explained. Select the main changes accurately and give a concise overview of the largest rises and falls.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview and separate paragraphs for the two years. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and words such as “Overall” and “In 2008” signal transitions. However, progression is uneven: the overview makes a confusing claim about both working and sleeping increasing, and the final paragraph combines sleeping, working, sports and socialising without a clear comparison. Some links are mechanical or unclear, as in “in contrast” and “similarly,” which do not accurately show the relationships between the figures. Grouping the main increases together and the decreases together, then using clear comparisons between years, would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “category,” “accounted for” and “downward trend,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or too informal for an academic summary. “Homies” and “hangout” are unsuitable for this task, while “fewest contribution” and “adults are improved their proportion” do not express the intended meanings clearly. Repetition of “adults,” “category” and “proportion” also limits flexibility. Aim for precise terms such as “share,” “percentage,” “rose,” “fell” and “spent time socialising,” and check that each phrase describes the data rather than the people themselves.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few longer structures, including the overview and the sentence comparing sleeping in the two years, but control is inconsistent and errors occur frequently. Examples include “The both pie chart illustrates,” “majority of the adults are accounted in,” and “sleeping category are shown downward trend,” where articles, agreement and sentence structure are faulty. Tense and verb patterns are also problematic in “adults spend their day” and “adults are improved their proportion.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly after full stops and around “in contrast.” These errors sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to understand. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses such as “while” and “whereas.”

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