Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart give information about the percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities in going out with friends/family and working, relaxing at home and sleeping or travelling to work. This chart explain in next paragraps.

Moreover, the started from 1958 to 2008 difference spent on the working in 33% and 2008 is a 42%. At a glance, people are going out with friends/family in 1958 is a 19% and 2008 is a decrease the percentage in 13%. However, the realxing at the home 8% and 2008 is a increase 7%.

Along with that, at 1958 is a sleeping in 32% and 2008 is a 25% and people are Travelling to work in 2% and 2008 in 7%. Moreover, the playing sports are people are do not attration for games because playing sports are1958 is a 5% and 2008 is a 2% increse the playing sports .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant categories and report some correct figures, including work rising from 33% to 42%, sleep falling from 32% to 25%, and commuting increasing from 2% to 7%. However, the response gives no clear overview of the main changes, and some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: going out fell from 19% to 6%, not 13%, while relaxing at home rose from 8% to 13%, not by 7%. The sports figures are also misreported: the chart shows 7% in 2008, with no sports category shown for 1958. The opening mainly lists activities rather than summarising the charts. Select the largest changes and state them accurately in a concise overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response begins with an introduction and then groups several comparisons in two paragraphs. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “Along with that” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the opening sentence is unclear, the next sentence (“This chart explain in next paragraps”) does not introduce useful information, and comparisons are packed into long, awkward sequences. Some connectors do not express a clear relationship between the points. Use a clear introduction, a separate overview, and body paragraphs that group the main increases and decreases; connect each figure directly to its comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentages,” “working,” “sleeping,” and “travelling to work,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or forms make the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “the started from 1958 to 2008 difference spent on the working” is not a clear way to describe a change, while “do not attration for games” does not communicate a precise chart observation. Spelling errors such as “realxing,” “paragraps,” and “increse” also reduce clarity. Practise accurate trend language and use standard spellings for key activity labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to compare the two years, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent grammatical errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “The pie chart give information,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “people are going out … in 1958 is a 19%,” which combines incompatible sentence patterns. Articles and verb forms are also problematic in phrases such as “the realxing at the home 8%” and “people are do not.” Most comparisons would be clearer as complete sentences with a consistent past or present reporting form, for example, “The proportion working rose from 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008.” Focus first on subject–verb agreement and building one complete comparison per sentence.

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