Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts indicates the working of adults in particular country spending their time from 1958 to 2008.

Overall pie charts compares the young people working schedule which spends in the passage of time from 1958 to 2008.

The people not give more preference to working in century 1958 although compare to century 2000. The growth of working culture rapidly increased as compare to past. Even look to other factor people sleeping habits gradually decreased as compare to recent century.

In past adults are not involved in some of the activity just suppose as playing certain sports these new habits just rise in the year 2008.

The year 2008 ratio of going out with friends and family are seem to be look dramatically decreased as watch-out in the past. The new generation also giving preference to relaxing at home as check to old records in the year 1958 which is quite good for the health and relaxing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several genuine overall changes: working took a larger share of the day in 2008, sleeping declined, and going out with friends or family became less common. You also note that sports appears only in the later chart. These are relevant features, but the response does not report any percentages, so the scale of the changes is unclear and the comparison remains general. The opening also misidentifies the charts as showing young people’s work schedules; they concern working adults’ time across activities. Some comments, such as calling relaxation “quite good for the health,” add an unsupported judgement rather than describing the data. Include an accurate overview and support the main comparisons with key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, broad comments on changes, and further comparisons. This gives the reader some sense of the topic, and phrases such as “although compare to” and “as compare to” attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several sentences repeat general claims without grouping the activities or presenting a clear overview. The two opening sentences largely duplicate one another, while the later points move between work, sleep, sports, socialising and relaxation without a consistent structure. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or unclear. Organise the response into a concise introduction and overview, followed by comparisons grouped by increases and decreases, using clear links between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing change, including “increased,” “decreased,” “preference,” and “relaxing at home.” This shows an attempt to discuss trends rather than simply list activities. However, the range is limited and several word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, which sometimes makes the intended meaning hard to interpret. For example, “working culture rapidly increased” does not clearly describe the proportion of time spent working, and “look dramatically decreased as watch-out” is not an appropriate way to report a chart trend. “Young people” is also an inaccurate label for the adults shown. Use precise chart language and familiar collocations such as “the proportion of the day spent on…” and “fell sharply.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparisons, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The pie charts indicates” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “The people not give more preference to working” has an incorrect verb form and an unclear construction. In “The year 2008 ratio … are seem to be look,” several verbs are combined incorrectly, obscuring the comparison. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or misplaced, as in “in century 1958.” Most sentences would benefit from being rebuilt around a clear subject and verb. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and agreement, then use a few controlled comparative structures.

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