Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrates the percentages of working adults in a particular country spend their time in 1958 and 2008.

The percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities in 1958 and 2008 differ. The sleeping percentage in 1958 is 32% which experiences a sudden decline and reaches about 25% in 2008 and the travelling to work time increases as nowadays more traffic issues occur. Around 1958, people like to going out with friends or the families but in 2008 most people like to enjoy alone or has privacy issues.

Furthermore,in 1958 the working ratio is low but in 2008 working percentage rises sharply similarly the amount of sports playing in 1958 was bit low as playing sports percentage increases. Furthermore, the relaxing at home was not common in19's but in 2008 moe people like to stay at home for the relaxation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant changes, including the fall in sleeping from 32% to 25%, the rise in working from 33% to 42%, and the increase in travel to work from 2% to 7%. However, the response has no clear overview of the main patterns, and some comparisons are inaccurate or unsupported: sports is shown only in 2008, so its change from 1958 cannot be described, while claims about traffic problems, privacy, and people preferring to stay home are not demonstrated by the charts. The figures for going out (19% to 6%) and relaxing at home (8% to 13%) could be reported more precisely. The response is also five words below the required minimum. Select the key changes, give an accurate overview, and avoid explanations the data cannot establish.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some grouping of information: the response first mentions sleeping, travel and socialising, then moves to work, sport and relaxing at home. This gives the reader a basic sense of the chart comparison. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and the opening repeats the task rather than presenting a useful overview. Connectors such as “Furthermore” are repeated without showing a precise relationship between the points, and the long second sentence combines several comparisons and unsupported explanations. Paragraphing is limited, and references such as “the amount of sports playing in 1958” make the sequence harder to follow. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and grouped details for each year or for rising and falling categories.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough topic vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “percentages,” “decline,” “increases,” and “relaxing at home.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are awkward, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “working ratio” is not a natural way to describe the chart figure, and “the amount of sports playing” is imprecise. “People like to going out” and “enjoy alone” also do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are spelling and spacing slips, including “moe” and “in19's.” Use standard chart language such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “rose/fell from … to …,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and some basic clauses are understandable, such as “the working percentage rises sharply.” However, control is inconsistent, particularly in longer sentences that join several ideas. Examples include “The pie chart illustrates the percentages of working adults … spend their time,” where the clause structure is incomplete, and “the sleeping percentage … is 32% which experiences a sudden decline,” where the relative clause is incorrectly attached. There are also errors in verb forms and agreement, as in “people like to going” and “most people like … or has.” Punctuation and spacing need attention, for example “Furthermore,in.” Use shorter, complete comparison sentences and check tense, agreement, and clause structure.

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