Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie- charts llisutrate about the who the adults spend thier time in working on the base of 1958 and 2008 data.

It is crystal clear that the other activities has grewn but not in relaxing.

The higest percentage of the day spent in working by adults.

IN 1950 the adults were more fouse on working rather then others activites till 2008 it is the higest among all by 42%. In 2008 the percentage of adults playing sports and travelling to work has same percentage,before that the percentage of travelling was 2% which is double of its percentage of palying sports.

In 1958 the adults sleeping hours is more and relaxing at house is less percentage but, now is change the percentage of sleeping is 25% and relaxing at house 13% whole they were working. The massive change seen aduts going out with friends / family because in 1958 its percenatge was 19% but now its decline up to 6% when they are working.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant features, including the rise in working time to 42% in 2008, the fall in socialising from 19% to 6%, and the changes in sleeping and relaxing. However, the response only partially summarises the charts: it gives little clear, accurate comparison across the two years and does not provide a well-defined overview of the main shifts. The statement that “other activities has grewn but not in relaxing” is unclear and does not match the data, since relaxing at home increased from 8% to 13%. There is also a factual error in saying that 2% is “double” the sports figure; sports is not shown for 1958, while travel was 7% in 2008. Select the largest changes and report them precisely to strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to group information: the response begins with an introduction, then discusses work and travel, followed by sleep, relaxation and socialising. This gives the reader a basic sense of the topics being compared. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is unclear and several ideas are joined in long, confusing sentences. For example, “In 1958 the adults sleeping hours is more and relaxing at house is less percentage but, now is change…” does not clearly separate the two comparisons. Linking words such as “but” and “because” are used without making the relationships clear. Use distinct paragraphs for an overview and key comparisons, and connect each figure directly to the activity and year it describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “decline,” “working,” and “going out with friends/family,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “llisutrate,” “grewn,” “fouse,” and “percenatge.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “the adults spend their time in working” and “relaxing at house.” Aim for accurate, standard chart language such as “the proportion of time spent working” and “relaxing at home.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “percentage” when a more precise phrase such as “share of the day” or “figure” would make the comparison clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentences, including comparisons with “but” and “because.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the intended meaning hard to follow. For example, “The higest percentage of the day spent in working by adults” is a fragment, while “the adults sleeping hours is more” has problems with possession, agreement and sentence construction. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent in “other activities has…” and “now is change.” Punctuation and capitalisation, including the isolated “IN,” further disrupt readability. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense reporting for the two chart years, for example: “In 1958, adults spent 32% of the day sleeping.”

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