Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In both chart it explains the percentages of the day spent by adults on various activities. in 1958 it represents going out with family or friends percentage was 19% then come to the travelling to work it was about 2%, sleeping 32% working 33% ans then relaxing at home was 8%. but in 2008 percentages are different. playing sports was not included in 1958 but in 2008 adults prefer playing sports with the percentage of 7% going out with friends or family decreases from 19% to 6% now. travelling to work is now 7% working is now 42% sleeping 25% and relaxing at home is 13%. basically these charts showing how people spent their day. from 1958 to 2008 mindsets of adults changed. in 2008 the most highest percentage is working it is about 42% it shows adults are more focused towards working and wants to make their career. whole chart diagram was focused how the percentages works for every aspect.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report most of the chart figures accurately, including the rise in working from 33% to 42%, the fall in socialising from 19% to 6%, and the new sports category at 7%. You also identify working as the largest share in 2008. However, the response is mainly a list of figures rather than a clear summary of the main patterns. The overview is vague (“these charts showing how people spent their day”), and the claim that adults’ “mindsets” changed or that they wanted to build careers is not demonstrated by the data. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the major shifts—more time working, travelling and relaxing at home, but less sleeping and socialising—and avoid explanations the charts cannot support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response includes relevant information from both years, and the contrast signalled by “but in 2008” helps the reader follow the basic comparison. However, ideas are not arranged into a clear progression: the opening immediately lists 1958 figures, then the 2008 figures, followed by repeated general comments about what the charts show. There is no distinct overview to guide the reader, and several details are joined in a long, loosely punctuated sequence. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview of the main changes, and focused comparisons grouped by rising and falling activities. Use linking phrases selectively and make each sentence express one clear comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the categories and changes, including “percentage,” “decreases,” “working,” and “relaxing at home.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “these charts showing how people spent their day” and “the most highest percentage.” Some wording also adds unsupported interpretation, for example “more focused towards working.” Aim for precise chart-reporting language and vary verbs for change, such as “rose,” “fell,” and “remained.” Prefer neutral descriptions of what the figures show rather than claims about adults’ motives. More accurate collocations will make the comparisons clearer and more formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect ideas with clauses and comparisons, but sentence structures are mostly simple or run together, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. Examples include “In both chart it explains,” “in 1958 it represents,” and “these charts showing,” where agreement or verb forms are faulty. The long sentence beginning “playing sports was not included” also needs clearer punctuation and sentence boundaries. There are errors with articles and forms as well, such as “the most highest percentage.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete clauses, then use a few controlled comparative structures—for example, “Working rose from 33% to 42%, whereas sleeping fell from 32% to 25%.”

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