Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided pie charts delineates the various percentages of different activities by the adults spent on a day through two distinctive year as follows 1958 and 2008

It is readily apparent that, both of the pie charts have been dominated by work throughout the two timeline. It is noticeable that working hour spent by adults has raised in the modern time.

Starting with year 1958 where 33% of the whole day spent on working, next in line is sleeping which is 32% of total time. Up next is going out with friends and family which was spent 19% of the total time. Conversly year 2008 42% spent over working which a higher version than the 1958's percentage. 25% spent on sleeping which is much more lower than the formal 1958' s percentage. Only 6% has been spent over Hanging out with friends and family.

Subsequently, Relaxing at home covered 8% of the total time in 1958 whereas year 2008 it increased to 13%. In addition travelling and working was only covering 2% of the whole day in 1958 on the other hand there is slight surge in 2008 which is 7%.It is also noticeable that 7% of the total day spent on sports in 2008 which was absent in year 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern that work took the largest share in both years and correctly report several key figures, including work rising from 33% to 42%, sleep falling from 32% to 25%, and socialising dropping from 19% to 6%. You also include the increases in relaxing at home and commuting, and note that sport appears in 2008. This covers the chart’s main categories and gives a relevant overview. To make the summary more fully developed, compare the categories more systematically and clarify that sport is shown only for 2008, rather than implying a measured change from a known 1958 figure. The overview could also highlight the broad contrast between increased work/commuting and reduced sleep/socialising more explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs reporting details. The sequence from the larger categories to the smaller ones is generally understandable, and linking phrases such as “Starting with” and “In addition” help guide the reader. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, with repeated transitions such as “Up next” and “Subsequently,” and the comparison between years is not consistently organised by category. Some links are unclear: “travelling and working” appears to combine two separate activities, while “on the other hand” does not clearly connect the figures that follow. Grouping each activity with its two-year comparison would make the information easier to follow and improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “total time,” “increased,” and “surge,” and the reader can generally understand the categories being described. There is some attempt to vary wording, for example “going out with friends and family” and “hanging out.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise for an academic report: “higher version” for a larger proportion, “spent over working,” and “formal 1958’s percentage.” “Dominated” is also stronger than necessary when describing the largest category. Spelling and form errors such as “Conversly” and inconsistent capitalisation reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, neutral collocations such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “compared with.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons using “whereas” and “on the other hand,” but control is uneven. Errors in sentence structure and verb forms occur in examples such as “33% of the whole day spent on working” and “42% spent over working,” where a finite verb and a more accurate grammatical construction are needed. Agreement and article use are also problematic in “The provided pie charts delineates” and “which a higher version.” Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly around sentence boundaries. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the intended comparisons are usually recoverable. Practise complete clauses such as “Working accounted for 33% of the day” and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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