Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart shows the percentages of the day spent by working adults in a particular country between the year 1958 and 2008.

If you look at the chart in 1958, working adult spent most of their time working and sleeping.Some working adult tend to sleep during due to the day due to fact that their job requires them to work overnight. They enjoy less than 1/3 of their time going our with friends/family. The least amount of time spent is travelling to work.

In comparison to working adults in 2008, almost half of adult workers spend their day working. Sleeping adult workers make it to 25% and relaxing at home makes it to 13%. Travelling to work, going out with friends and playing sports have an equal proportion.

A big proportion of working adults spend their time in their workplace for both years. Noticed that the amount of unemployed back in the year 1958 is more than the year of 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant figures, including working at 33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008, sleeping at 25% in 2008, and travelling at 2% in 1958. However, the response only partially summarises the charts: it gives no clear overview of the main changes, and the claim that workers spent “most” of their time working and sleeping in 1958 is imprecise because these are separate categories. The statement about workers sleeping because their jobs require overnight work is invented and unsupported by the chart. “Unemployed” is also not represented; the chart shows time spent on activities. To improve, report the major shifts accurately, including the fall in socialising and sleeping and the appearance of sports in 2008, without adding explanations the data cannot establish.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: it discusses 1958, then 2008, and ends with a comparison. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “In comparison” signal a shift between years. However, there is no clear overall progression from an overview to the most important details, and the final paragraph introduces an unsupported point about unemployment rather than drawing together the chart’s main trends. Some linking is awkward or repetitive, while the opening “If you look at the chart” is conversational rather than a clear reporting transition. Organise the response around a concise overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use references such as “this figure” or “the proportion” clearly to connect related data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentages,” “proportion,” “travelling to work,” and “relaxing at home,” so the reader can identify the activities being discussed. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or informal. “A big proportion” is vague, “working adult” is repeated, and “unemployed” mislabels the chart’s information rather than describing an activity. There are also noticeable word-choice and spelling slips, such as “going our” for “going out” and “make it to” for “accounts for.” Aim for precise chart language and vary terms for shares and changes, while avoiding unsupported interpretations. For example, describe a category as “the largest share” rather than making a broad claim about adults’ time.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and some sentences communicate the figures clearly, such as “Sleeping adult workers make it to 25%.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. In the opening, “between the year 1958 and 2008” has an awkward number pattern; “working adult spent” lacks plural agreement; and “Some working adult tend” also needs a plural subject and matching verb. The sentence beginning “due to the day due to fact” is structurally unclear, while “Noticed that” is an incomplete sentence. Punctuation spacing is inconsistent, including missing spaces after full stops. Practise accurate plural forms, complete clauses, and controlled complex sentences before adding more elaborate explanations.

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