Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts reveal how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is clear that working and sleeping accounted for the highest proportion while going out with family or friends repersented the lowest percentage.

In 1958, working adults spend their 33% of time for working and 32% of time for sleeping. They also like to go out with family or friends so they spend their 19% of time for this activity. They spend 8% of their time while relaxing at home and only 2% for travelling to work and that was the lowest percentage in 1958.

In 2008, their time for working is increased to 42% so now they spend their majority of time for working but their sleeping time is reduced and they spend 25% of their time for sleeping. They spend little more time for relaxing at home in 2008 and then 1958. They spend equal time for travelling to work and for playing sports which is 7% of their time. They spend only 6% of their time for going out with family or friends in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both years and report the main shifts accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and going out drops from 19% to 6%. The overview identifies work and sleep as major activities and socialising as the smallest share overall, although it would be more precise to note that work becomes the largest category in 2008 and that sports appears only in that year. Most figures are correctly selected, including the equal 7% shares for commuting and sport in 2008. The comparison of relaxing at home is less fully reported: it rises from 8% to 13%, but the response gives no figures and uses an unclear comparison. A sharper overview and fuller comparison of this change would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear four-paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of 1958 and 2008. This makes the information easy to follow, and the year-based organisation is appropriate. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because several sentences begin with “They spend,” and the repeated “In 1958” and “In 2008” framing limits variety. Some references are also unclear: “They spend little more time for relaxing at home in 2008 and then 1958” does not express the comparison cleanly. Link the figures more directly with contrast and change language, and use clearer references to the activities rather than repeatedly relying on “they.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to describe the chart, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “reduced,” and “travelling to work.” These choices help communicate the main trends. However, the range is limited by repeated wording such as “spend their time” and “time for,” and some collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “spend their 33% of time for working” and “spend 8% of their time while relaxing.” “Repersented” is also misspelled, and “majority” is not quite precise for a 42% share. Aim for concise chart language such as “accounted for 33%,” “the share rose,” and “the largest proportion”; check spelling and choose collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, and the overall meaning is generally clear. There are, however, some errors in verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “working adults spend” and “their time for working is increased” do not use the tense or structure needed to describe past chart data; use “spent” and “the proportion working increased.” The pattern “spend their 33% of time for working” is also grammatically awkward, while “little more time … in 2008 and then 1958” lacks a clear comparative construction. Most sentences remain understandable, but more consistent past-tense reporting and accurate comparative structures would improve control.

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