Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The pie charts compares the amount of time spent by working adults on different activities in a country in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, It is evident that most of their time is occupied with working. Sleeping and relaxing at home are other most popular activities for working adults in both years. However, time spent with family and on sports has declined by the end of the period.

In 1958, Working was most common among the adults with jobs which accounted for 33%, followed by sleeping at 32%. Going out with family/ friends was third most common among employed people which made up nearly one fifth of the total. Furthermore, relaxing at home made up 8%. Involvement in sports and travelling to work represented only 6% and 2%, respectively, making them the least likely activities among workers.

By 2008, working time and relaxing at home increased 42% and 13%, encouraging work life balance. Meanwhile, sleeping proportions fell considerably to 25%. Similarly, time allocated for going out with friends/ family also declined sharply to 6% only. However, commuting time as well as sports reported an increase to 7% each.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern that work takes the largest share in both years and report several relevant figures, including work rising from 33% to 42%, sleep falling to 25%, and travel increasing to 7%. The response also gives a clear overview. However, the overview says time spent “with family and on sports has declined,” which is inaccurate: going out with friends and family declines, but sports appears only in 2008 at 7%, so no decline can be shown. The 1958 account also incorrectly includes sports at 6%; the chart instead shows 19% for going out with friends and family. These misreadings and the limited comparison of the full pattern keep the summary from being consistently precise. Distinguish categories carefully and compare the largest changes directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised effectively into an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. This gives the reader a clear progression from the general picture to supporting details, and linking expressions such as “followed by,” “Furthermore,” and “Meanwhile” help connect information. The year-by-year structure is easy to follow, although comparing the same categories across years more directly would make the progression more analytical and reduce the sense of listing. Some transitions are also slightly awkward: “However” introduces commuting and sports increases, but these are not a contrast with the preceding point in a particularly clear way. Overall, cohesion is flexible and the paragraphing is appropriate; more deliberate cross-year grouping would make the comparisons even smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 7.0

You use a good range of task-appropriate vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “made up,” “represented,” “declined sharply,” and “fell considerably.” These choices allow you to describe proportions and changes without relying on one repeated verb. There are occasional imprecise or unnatural collocations, however. “The amount of time … on different activities” would be more naturally expressed as “the proportion of the day spent on different activities,” while “encouraging work life balance” is an unsupported interpretation rather than a neutral description of the chart. “Reported an increase” is also less natural for a chart category than “rose.” Aim for precise, neutral language and avoid implying reasons or effects that the data do not show.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including subordinate clauses and comparison structures, and most sentences communicate their meaning clearly. Some grammatical errors remain. The opening should be “The pie charts compare,” because the plural subject requires a plural verb. In “working time and relaxing at home increased 42% and 13%,” the figures need a construction such as “increased to 42% and 13%.” Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “Overall, It” and “Working” within a sentence. These errors do not generally obstruct understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Check subject–verb agreement, the distinction between “increase to” and “increase by,” and sentence-level capitalisation during revision.

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