Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the pie chart demonstarte the adults working hour in specific region that spent their time between 1958 to 2008

the major affect sen in percentage of day spent by working adults on different activities.however in 1958 working rate is 33 % which is now increses in 2008 upto level 42 %this show that working level in gradually increases.but 1958 slleping rate is higher as compared to 2008 the rate is decrease due to hectic routine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify two relevant changes: working rises from 33% to 42%, while sleeping falls from 32% to 25%. However, the response covers only a small part of the charts and gives no clear overview of the main pattern across all activities. It omits relaxing at home, travel to work, and going out with friends or family, as well as the 2008 sports category. The explanation that sleeping decreased “due to hectic routine” is not supported by the chart, which reports proportions but gives no reasons. The response is also 75 words below the required minimum. To address the task more fully, summarise the biggest changes and compare several categories using accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, then mentions working and sleeping. The contrast signalled by “however” and “but” helps show that these figures move in different directions. However, the ideas are compressed into one continuous paragraph, and the opening is difficult to connect to the comparisons that follow. There is no distinct overview or clear grouping of the remaining activities, so the reader cannot follow a complete account of the data. Some linking words are used without making the relationships fully clear. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two comparison paragraphs, using connectors such as “whereas” and “by contrast” where they accurately express the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “working,” and “sleeping,” and the reader can recognise the two main activities you compare. However, the range is limited and several word choices or phrases are inaccurate or unclear, such as “major affect sen,” “working rate,” and “hectic routine.” Spelling errors, including “demonstarte,” “increses,” and “slleping,” also make the writing less clear. For chart descriptions, use precise terms such as “proportion” or “share,” and describe figures as “increased” or “fell” rather than as a “rate” when reporting percentages of time. Check spelling carefully and choose neutral language that reports what the charts show without adding unsupported interpretation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example, “in 1958 working rate is 33% which is now increses in 2008.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in tense, verb forms, articles, and punctuation make the comparisons difficult to read. In “the rate is decrease,” the verb form is incorrect; “the rate decreased” would be grammatical. The opening also lacks clear sentence boundaries, and the final explanation is joined to the chart description without effective punctuation. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses—for example, “Working accounted for 33% in 1958, rising to 42% in 2008.”

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