Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two pie charts give a comparison on how adult workers in a cetrain country hanve spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working accounted for the largest proportion of time which spent by working adults during the day in 1958 and 2008. Sleeping ranked socend in the two years, while travelling to work, playing sports and relaxing at home represented the smallest proportion in 1958. However, relaxing at home, working and sleeping time, have showed an increase in their percentage by the year 2008.

In 1958, working constituted the greatest proportion of the day, at 33%, followed by sleeping, at 32%. Going out with friends or family represted 19% of the day spent by working adults, while relaxing at home and travelling to work accounted for the lowest proportion of day, at 8% and 2 % respectively.

Working hours domenstrated an increase in 2008, when the percentage became 42%, but sleeping proportion declined, and reached 25%. Relaxing at home ranked third in 2008, after a noticable increase and reached 13%. playing sports and travelling to work both accounted for 7% of day time spent by working adults, while going out with friends and family accounted for smallest percentage, at 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern that work took the largest share in both years and support the account with relevant figures, including the rise from 33% to 42% and the fall in going out from 19% to 6%. The body also covers the other categories, so the key information is broadly addressed. However, the overview contains a significant contradiction: it says that sleeping time increased by 2008, whereas the figures show a decline from 32% to 25%. It also describes sports as one of the smallest categories in 1958, although sports is not listed for that year. The overview would be more effective if it clearly highlighted the main increases and decreases without these inaccuracies; some comparisons are currently more fully reported than interpreted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. This makes the information easy to locate, and sequencing within the 1958 paragraph—from work and sleep to the smaller categories—is generally logical. You also use linking expressions such as “Overall,” “while,” and “but” to signal comparisons. At times, however, the overview’s claims do not align with the later figures, which weakens the progression of the report. Some links are also repetitive or mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “while” and “accounted for.” For a stronger, more flexible flow, organise the overview around the main changes, then use the body paragraphs to substantiate those changes consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “constituted,” “declined,” “proportion,” and “accounted for,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “ranked third” and “demonstrated an increase.” However, several spelling errors—“cetrain,” “hanve,” “socend,” “represted,” and “domenstrated”—reduce accuracy. Some phrases are awkward or imprecise: “comparison on how” is less natural than “comparison of how,” and “sleeping proportion” would be clearer as “the proportion of time spent sleeping.” Aim for accurate spelling and natural collocations, and avoid repeating “proportion” when “share” or “percentage” would fit.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons joined with “while” and “but,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless affect accuracy. In the overview, “time which spent” is missing a passive verb (“time that was spent”), and “sleeping time, have showed” has incorrect agreement and verb form. The phrase “the lowest proportion of day” also needs an article, while “reached 25%” lacks a clear subject in its clause. Capitalisation is inconsistent at the start of “playing sports.” To improve, check subject–verb agreement, use complete relative clauses, and make sure each comparison has a clear grammatical subject. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control.

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