Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the various acitivities of working adults of the day in a specific country in 1958 and 2008.

Looking at the details, in 1958, working adult spent most of their time at working, represented 33%. followed by sleeping 32% was the second most doing activity. However, going out with friends/family shared 19%. Meanwhile, relaxing at home constitued 8% in 1958. While travelling to work had the least percentage in 1958, accounted for 2%.

In 2008, the figure of the working acitivity increased, made up 42%. In contrast, sleeping percenatge fell, represented 25% in 2008. Furthermore, relaxing at home activity rose form the percentage in 1958 to 13% in 2008. Travelling to work porportion also rose and made up 7%. However, in 2008 there was an addition of another activity playing sports which shared the 7%. While, the going out with friends/family percentage slumped dramcatically, accounted for 6% in 2008.

Overall, working adults activities experienced significant changes; the percentage of working rose over the period of time. In contrast going out with family/friends figure fell considerably. Sleeping also increased slightly, travelling to work and realxing at home figures were also rise over the period of time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both years and report the main changes, including the rise in working time from 33% to 42% and the sharp fall in going out from 19% to 6%. Most figures are accurate, and the new sports category in 2008 is included. However, the overview contains a significant contradiction: it says sleeping “increased slightly,” although your detailed account correctly states that it fell from 32% to 25%. The overview also says travelling and relaxing “were also rise,” without clearly summarising their increases. To strengthen the response, make the overview a concise, accurate comparison of the largest rises and falls, and ensure every trend agrees with the figures reported in the body.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate descriptions of the two years, and a concluding overview. The sequence within each year is generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “In contrast” and “Furthermore” help signal comparisons. This organisation is effective, though some transitions are mechanical or awkward, particularly the repeated “While” and “However.” The final overview also conflicts with the earlier account of sleeping, which weakens the logical progression. For a more polished flow, group related increases and decreases across the years, use fewer formulaic connectors, and check that the conclusion accurately synthesises the details already presented.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “represented,” “proportion,” “slumped dramatically,” and “accounted for,” so the main information remains understandable. However, several spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations reduce accuracy: “acitivities,” “percenatge,” “dramcatically,” and “working adult spent most of their time at working.” Some words are also repeated, especially “percentage” and “activity,” and “shared” is not a natural way to describe a chart proportion. Aim for precise collocations and proofread spelling; terms such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “fell to” can describe the figures clearly without awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, errors in sentence construction, agreement, tense and punctuation are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “working adult spent most of their time at working, represented 33%” lacks a clear grammatical link between the clauses, while “travelling to work and realxing at home figures were also rise” has an incorrect verb form and agreement. The sentence beginning “While travelling to work…” is also a fragment, and “In 1958” after a full stop begins with an unnecessary lowercase letter. Practise complete clauses and consistent past-tense reporting, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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