Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given pie charts provide the imformation about the percentage of the day spend by the working people on different activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is evident that in both yeras people spent more time for their work and sleep.But comparativelly, the percentage of time for playing sports is very low in both of the years.

Initially, in 1958 the working adults used 33 percentage of their day time for working and 32 % to take rest.The third most importang activity was going out with friends and family accounted for 19% in the same year.The rest of the three activities like relaxing at home ,playing sports and travelling to work were only given a limited amount of time .

In stark contrast, in 2008 the time give for work was increased to 42% whereas,the percentage of sleep and going out with family and friends got reduced to 25% and 6% respectively.The time allocation for playing sports were stable for both of the years.Working adults raised their time to take rest in 2008 to 13 % from 8%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important comparisons accurately: work rises from 33% to 42%, sleep falls from 32% to 25%, and socialising drops from 19% to 6%. However, the overview is not fully reliable: sports is not shown in 1958, so it is inaccurate to say its share was low in both years or stable. The report also omits the 2008 travel figure and does not clearly compare travel (2% to 7%), while the 1958 description groups the remaining activities without giving their figures. These gaps and the unsupported sports comparison make coverage partial, despite relevant data and a clear attempt to summarise the charts. Include the full set of categories and ensure every comparison is supported by the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing each year. This makes the main comparisons easy to follow, and transitions such as “Overall,” “Initially,” and “In stark contrast” help signal the progression. The contrast paragraph also groups related changes in work, sleep, and socialising effectively. However, some linking is mechanical, and the final paragraph shifts between categories without a fully systematic comparison. The sentence about the “rest of the three activities” is also unclear because sports is not listed for 1958 in the data. To strengthen progression, organise the details consistently by category or by the largest changes, and use linking phrases only where they clarify relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “accounted for,” “in stark contrast,” and “time allocation.” These choices help communicate comparisons, although some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “used 33 percentage of their day time,” “time give for work,” and “time to take rest.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “imformation,” “yeras,” “comparativelly,” and “importang,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the report. Some repetition of “time” and “percentage” could also be avoided through more precise alternatives. Aim for standard chart-reporting collocations, such as “accounted for 33% of the day” and “the proportion allocated to work,” and proofread spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast clause with “whereas” and a comparative structure describing the change from 8% to 13%. The meaning is generally understandable, but errors occur in verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “the percentage of the day spend” needs a past participle, while “the time give for work was increased” has an incorrect verb form and passive construction. “The time allocation for playing sports were stable” also has subject–verb disagreement, and several sentences have missing spaces after full stops or commas. These errors make some sentences awkward, though the main message remains accessible. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and check agreement and sentence punctuation when editing.

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