Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Task 1

The above graphs represent the percentage of day spent by working adults on various activities.

In the year 1958, the number of students curious to sleep, whereas many of them working with their family and they also received highest percentage in these fieds. Many of them also exicited to visist outside places with their friends and family. furthermore, some of he students also travells to the tourist sites.

In the year 2008, the students prefer work more as compared to previous year. 42% students doing work in the current year. Pupils also prefer to sleep almost 25% doing this activities. The travelling and playing recieved same percentage in year 2008 7%. This also describes that students are more happy to play outside as well as travelling.

In conclusion, it is clear that students also earning as well as studying so that they can earn. This also makes them physiaclly as well as mentally prepare about future. The students who become independent can develop their career by own.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes some relevant comparisons, including that work rose to 42% in 2008 and that travelling and sport each accounted for 7% then. However, much of the description misidentifies the people as “students” and introduces unsupported ideas about studying, earning, independence and future careers. The 1958 account is especially unclear: it does not accurately report that working and sleeping were the largest shares (33% and 32%), and it gives no clear account of the 19% spent going out with friends or family. There is no concise, accurate overview of the main changes, such as work increasing while sleep and socialising declined. Focus on the chart’s categories and percentages, and avoid explanations or conclusions not shown by the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure, with separate paragraphs for 1958 and 2008 and a concluding paragraph. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is weakened by unclear or disconnected statements, such as “the number of students curious to sleep” and the conclusion about becoming independent, which does not follow from the chart description. Linking words such as “whereas,” “furthermore,” and “in conclusion” are attempted, but they do not consistently clarify the relationships between ideas. Organise the response around an overview followed by the most important comparisons, and use references such as “this proportion” only when their meaning is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use a range of activity-related vocabulary, including “travelling,” “sleep,” “work,” and “physically as well as mentally.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unsuitable for describing the chart: “students” replaces working adults, “curious to sleep” does not express time spent sleeping, and “received highest percentage” is an awkward collocation. Spelling errors such as “exicited,” “visist,” and “physiaclly” also reduce precision. These problems sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Use the chart’s own category labels and practise standard reporting phrases such as “accounted for,” “spent time,” and “the proportion increased.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes some simple sentences and attempts longer structures, for example, “The travelling and playing recieved same percentage in year 2008 7%.” However, sentence construction is often incomplete or inaccurate, and the reader must work to infer the intended meaning. Examples include “many of them working with their family,” which lacks a clear finite verb, and “42% students doing work,” which needs a grammatical subject and verb form. Articles and plural forms are also inconsistent, as in “the percentage of day” and “42% students.” Aim for clear, complete sentences with a subject and verb, and check tense and article use. For example: “In 2008, working accounted for 42% of the day.”

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