Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts illustrate the working adults in a specific country managed their time at home in 1958 and 2008.

In 1958, 33 percent people spent their time in working and also the working rate increased in 2008 upto 9 percent.

In 1958, the adults managed their time in such a way that 19% going out with their family and friends, 2% travelling to work, 32% sleeping, 8% relaxing at home, 33% working and 6% play sports.

In 2008, comparatively to 1958 it was good era, adults spent their time in playing sports approximately 7 percent, going out with friends and family 7% which is low according to 1958, travelling is little bit increased round about 5%, sleeping is decreased estimated 7%, realxing at home is sharply increase 5% and working is also increased upto 9%. Mostly things are increased in 2008 relatively 1958 sleeping and enjoying with their closed ones.

To sum up, in comparison, the 2008 year was good than 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two years and include several relevant categories, but the response reports the data inaccurately and does not provide a reliable overview of the main features. For example, you assign “6% play sports” to 1958, although sports appears only in the 2008 chart, at 7%; you also give 7% for going out in 2008, when the chart shows 6%. Some changes are described as differences rather than actual figures, and “the 2008 year was good” is an unsupported judgement rather than a summary of the data. To improve, check each figure against the chart and state the key overall changes objectively: work rose, while sleeping and socialising fell.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to details for each year and then a conclusion. However, the progression is difficult to follow because figures and comparisons are mixed together, and the second-year paragraph repeats information already given. Phrases such as “In 2008, comparatively to 1958” and “Mostly things are increased” do not clearly connect the comparisons, while the final sentence adds a vague judgement instead of drawing the main trends together. Organise the report into a clear overview followed by grouped comparisons, such as increases in work, travel and home relaxation, then decreases in sleep and socialising. Use linking expressions only where they clarify the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the charts, including “increased,” “decreased,” “approximately” and “in comparison,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or informal, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For instance, “working rate” is not a natural way to describe the share of the day spent working, and “good era” and “good than” express an opinion rather than chart information. There are also spelling errors such as “realxing.” Aim for precise chart language and accurate collocations, for example “the proportion of time spent working” and “rose by nine percentage points.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, but control is uneven, and errors in sentence structure and verb forms sometimes make the information hard to interpret. Examples include “33 percent people spent their time in working,” which needs an article and a more suitable grammatical pattern, and “realxing at home is sharply increase,” where the verb form is incorrect. The sentence beginning “In 1958, the adults managed their time in such a way that…” also lacks a clear grammatical structure before the list of figures. Practise forming accurate past-tense reporting sentences and comparisons, such as “The proportion working rose from 33% to 42%.”

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