Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
These two charts illustrate the percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities from 1958 to 2008.
Overall, the highest proportion activity is working of both charts in 1958 is (33%) and 2008 is (42%).
Moreover, the year of 1958 is the highest proportion activity is working (33%). Then, the sleeping is (32%), and going out with friends/family is (19%), and the relaxing at home (8%), then the low activity in the year of 1958 is travelling to work is only (2%).
In the above, the year of 2008 is the highest proportion activity is working (42%). Then the working of this year is sleeping (25%),this activity is above of the previous years, the travelling to work or playing sports both (7%) active in this year. Then, the last low activity in this year is going out with friends and family is only (6%). There are minior above activity in the year of 1958 to 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You identify the two years and report several key figures accurately, including working (33% to 42%), sleeping (32% to 25%), and travel to work (2% to 7%). However, the response mainly lists activities rather than summarising the most important changes. The overview says working was the largest category in both years, but it does not clearly capture the broader pattern: work and commuting took a greater share in 2008, while sleep and socialising declined; sports also appears only in 2008. Some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate, such as saying sleeping in 2008 is “above of the previous years,” when its share fell. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons would make the response more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview, and separate descriptions of 1958 and 2008. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is limited because the body paragraphs repeat the same ranking pattern, and links such as “Then” are used mechanically rather than to show meaningful comparisons. Phrases including “In the above” and “There are minior above activity” make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Grouping the figures by increases and decreases, and using clear comparison links such as “whereas” or “by contrast,” would create a more coherent progression.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “percentage,” “working adults,” “sleeping,” and “travelling to work,” so the reader can identify the activities being described. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “highest proportion activity” and “in the year of.” Some word combinations are unnatural or unclear, such as “the working of this year is sleeping” and “low activity.” The spelling error “minior” also reduces accuracy. Aim for more precise chart language and natural collocations, for example, “accounted for,” “share,” and “category,” while avoiding repeated sentence frames.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts to express more complex comparisons are often faulty. For example, “the highest proportion activity is working of both charts in 1958 is (33%) and 2008 is (42%)” has an unclear sentence structure, while “the working of this year is sleeping” does not form a clear grammatical comparison. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and punctuation, as in “the relaxing at home (8%), then the low activity” and “(25%),this activity.” These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to understand. Practise writing complete comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check punctuation between clauses.
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