Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two pie charts illustrate the percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities in 195 and 2008.

Overall, working percentage had the highest activities in both years, followed by sleeping proportion in both years. However, travelling to work were the lowest percentage in 1958, whereas going out with friends and family were the lowest percentage in 2008.

In 1958, working were the highest percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities at around 33%, followed by sleeping at around 32%. Going out with family and friends were the third highest percentage at around 19%. Moreover, relaxing at home represented at around 8%, but travelling to work had the lowest percentage at around 2%.

By the 2008, working activities had increased at around 42%. followed by sleeping, which is decreased dramatically at 25%. However, relaxing at home rise significantly and reached approximately 13%. Playing sports and traveling to work were both are same percentage at around 7%, while going out with friends and family had the lowest percentage in 2008 at around 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear overview of the main patterns: work is the largest category in both years, while the smallest category changes from commuting in 1958 to socialising in 2008. The figures you report for the main activities are consistent with the chart, including work rising from 33% to 42%, sleep falling from 32% to 25%, and socialising dropping to 6%. You also cover the other categories, including sport in 2008. This makes the response a well-supported summary of the key information. To strengthen it further, compare the two years more directly rather than mainly describing each chart in turn—for example, explicitly note the sharp fall in going out and the increases in commuting and relaxing at home.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear four-paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details for each year. This gives the information a generally logical progression, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “However” help signal relationships. The overview also prepares the reader for the detailed comparisons. However, some connections are mechanical or awkward: “Moreover” does not clearly add a distinct point, and “However” before the final 2008 figures does not express a clear contrast. The description is also organised mainly by year, so comparisons between corresponding categories are less connected. Grouping changes together—for instance, rising work and home relaxation against falling sleep and socialising—would create smoother progression and more flexible cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “percentages,” “followed by,” “represented,” “increased,” and “decreased.” The range is sufficient to communicate the main trends, but several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “working percentage had the highest activities,” “working activities,” and “relaxing at home rise significantly.” Repeated use of “percentage” also makes the account less fluent. Choose natural collocations such as “accounted for the largest share,” “the proportion of the day spent working,” and “rose to.” Check spelling consistency too: “traveling” is an accepted variant, but using one spelling convention throughout would look more controlled. More precise vocabulary for increases, decreases, and shares would improve clarity and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple statements and more complex sentences, including clauses with “whereas” and “which,” and the overall meaning remains understandable. However, errors in agreement, tense, articles, and sentence construction are noticeable. Examples include “working were the highest percentage,” “travelling to work were the lowest percentage,” and “relaxing at home rise significantly.” The sentence beginning “By the 2008” also has an unnecessary article, while “Playing sports and traveling to work were both are same percentage” combines incompatible verb forms. There is also a punctuation problem after “42%,” where a full stop separates the following fragment. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and past-tense reporting, and check that each sentence has a complete, correctly formed clause.

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