Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The two pie charts illustrates the proportions of time that working adults in a particular country spent on different daily activities in 1958 to 2008.

Overall, working and sleeping accounted for the largest proportions of the day in both years.However,the percentage of time devoted to work increased considerable over the period,while the figures for sleeping and socialising declined. spending time relaxing at home also became more common in 2008.

In 1958, working represented 33% of the day,making it the largest category, followed by sleeping at 32%. Going out with friends or family accounted for 19% of daily time,whereas relaxing to work represented the smallest contribution , at only 2%.

By 2008,the percentage of time s[ent working had risen significantly to 42%,an increase of 9 percentage points.In contrast,the figure for sleeping fell from 32% to 25%.Similarly,the proportion of time spent socialising dropped dramatically from 19% to 6%.Meanwhile,relaxing at home increased from 8% to 13%.Travelling to work also rose from 2% to 7%.Ultimately,playing sports accounted for 7% of the day in 2008,although this activity was not shown in the 1958 chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The response selects the main patterns and supports them with accurate figures: work rises from 33% to 42%, while sleeping and socialising fall, and home relaxation and commuting increase. The opening overview clearly identifies work and sleep as major activities and captures the broad changes. However, one factual error weakens precision: in 1958, 2% refers to travelling to work, not relaxing; relaxation was 8%. Also, the overview could more clearly note that playing sports appears only in 2008 and that work becomes the largest category. These are limited gaps in an otherwise well-focused summary, with relevant comparisons developed across both years. Check each category against the chart before assigning its value or ranking.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5

The response is organised effectively into an introduction, an overview, and chronological detail paragraphs. Its progression from the 1958 figures to the 2008 comparisons is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “In contrast,” “Similarly,” and “Meanwhile” help signal relationships between the data. The final sentence also adds the new sports category clearly. Some transitions and punctuation are less polished: “Overall” runs directly into “However,” and several sentences have missing spaces after commas or full stops. The overview’s sequence of changes could also be made more compact and balanced. Overall, the structure is clear and cohesive, while more careful editing would make the connections less noticeable and more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

There is a useful range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “proportion,” “declined,” “rose,” and “percentage points.” These choices allow the writer to describe both shares and changes, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward: “relaxing to work” appears to confuse relaxation with travelling to work, while “increased considerable” uses the wrong form. “Largest category” is also not accurate for 1958, when working at 33% slightly exceeded sleeping at 32%, though this is primarily a data interpretation issue. To strengthen lexical control, use precise activity labels and natural collocations consistently, such as “time spent relaxing at home” and “increased considerably.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and more complex structures, including comparisons with “whereas,” “while,” and “although,” and several sentences communicate the figures clearly. Some grammatical errors remain, however. The opening says “The two pie charts illustrates,” where the plural subject requires “illustrate.” In the overview, “increased considerable” needs the adverb “considerably,” and the sentence beginning “spending time relaxing” starts with an unintended lowercase letter and is not smoothly connected to the preceding sentence. Missing spaces after punctuation also affect presentation. These errors do not prevent understanding, but they show that agreement, word forms within sentence structures, and punctuation need more consistent checking. Proofread each sentence for a complete, correctly punctuated structure.

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