Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The two pie charts compares young individuals spend their specefic time by working in various activities between 1958 to 2008.

Overall, it is clear that in 1958, working accounted for the highest proportion while travelling to the bus remained lowest popular among adult. therefore, in 2008

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies two relevant features: work was the largest category in 1958, and travel to work was the smallest. However, the overview is left unfinished at “therefore, in 2008,” and there is no account of the main changes or the other activities. It also misdescribes the chart as being about “young individuals”; the data concern working adults. The task requires a summary of both years, but the response provides almost no comparisons or supporting figures and does not meet the 150-word minimum. To improve, complete the overview and report key changes accurately—for example, work rose from 33% to 42%, while going out with friends or family fell from 19% to 6%. The response addresses the task only minimally.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by a separate overview paragraph, and “Overall” signals a summary. However, the ideas do not progress beyond two incomplete statements. The final phrase, “therefore, in 2008,” is unfinished, leaving the reader without the promised comparison. The linking word “therefore” also does not express a clear cause-and-effect relationship here. Because there is so little information, relationships between the chart features are not established and paragraphing cannot support a coherent account. Build a clear sequence: introduce the charts, give a complete overview, then group and compare the main figures in body paragraphs. Use connectors only when their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a few task-relevant terms, including “pie charts,” “proportion,” “working,” and “travelling,” so the general topic is recognisable. However, the vocabulary is limited and some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “young individuals” does not match the chart’s working adults, “specefic time” is unclear, and “lowest popular” is not an appropriate collocation. “Travelling to the bus” also changes the chart category, which is travel to work. Spelling errors such as “specefic” further reduce precision. Use the chart’s labels and standard reporting language, such as “share of the day,” “accounted for,” and “the smallest proportion.” This would make the limited description clearer and more accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a complex opening sentence, but control of basic sentence structure and agreement is inconsistent. In “The two pie charts compares,” the plural subject requires “compare”; the phrase “young individuals spend their specefic time by working” also lacks a clear grammatical construction. The time comparison “between 1958 to 2008” uses mismatched prepositions, and “among adult” has an incorrect singular form. The overview ends with “therefore, in 2008,” which is a sentence fragment rather than a complete clause. There is little evidence of a range of sentence forms because the response is so brief. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add controlled clauses, for example, “Work rose from 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008.”

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