Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two pi charts illustrates how working adults in specific country deovte their time five different activities sleeping, Relexing at home, Working, Travelling to work, Outing with frend and family,and playing sports, from 1958 to 2008. While the percantage shows were proportion.

Overall, the twice Pi charts demonstrates the hightest account figure working. While going out with friends and family,and Travelling to works, considers lowest percentage repectivelly.

By 1958, working show the most increased to 33%, wherase the travelling to working fell to 2%,However the sleeping 33%. going out with frends and family, climed to 19%, While Relaxing at home slightly fall to 8 percetange of the day speny by working adults on different activities.

On other hand, 2001 accounted the most higest proporation working activities. playing sports, and Travelling to work remain unchanged were 7%. Going out with frend ans sports is decreasesd to 5%. However, relaxinf at home rose to 23%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad subject and make an attempt to compare the two years, including work, sleep, travel and socialising. However, the account is only minimally accurate: the overview says work is highest and travel is among the lowest, but it does not clearly summarise the major changes. Several figures or years are wrong: sleeping in 1958 was 32%, not 33%; the second chart is for 2008, not 2001; and in 2008 relaxing at home was 13%, not 23%. The statement that sports and travel were unchanged at 7% is also misleading, since sports is shown only in 2008 and travel rose from 2% to 7%. Select the main trends and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the two years. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and phrases such as “Overall” and “On other hand” attempt to signal progression. However, the progression is not consistently clear because comparisons and details are mixed together, and some sentences are difficult to follow, particularly the overview and the final paragraph. Linking words such as “While” and “However” are sometimes used without a clear contrast, while the list of activities in the opening is crowded. Group the information by the most important changes, and use straightforward links to show whether a figure rose, fell or remained stable.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “accounted,” “rose,” and “decreases,” and you attempt to describe proportions and changes. However, the range is limited and many word-choice, spelling and word-form errors make parts of the report hard to understand. Examples include “pi charts,” “deovte,” “hightest account figure,” and “most higest proporation.” Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “working show the most increased” and “travelling to working fell.” Use standard chart phrases such as “the proportion of the day spent working,” “accounted for the largest share,” and “increased from … to …”. Accurate spelling and natural collocations are especially important for making the data clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts at longer sentences and contrast clauses, for example, “While the … charts demonstrates…” and “On other hand…”. However, grammatical control is weak: errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur frequently and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For instance, “The two pi charts illustrates” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “working show the most increased to 33%” does not form a clear grammatical description. Several clauses are joined or punctuated poorly, as in the sentence beginning “By 1958,” which runs through multiple comparisons without clear boundaries. Practise writing short, accurate comparison sentences first, then combine them using correctly formed clauses and punctuation.

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