Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the ratio of working adults that how they spent their time in one country in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is clearly seen mostly that they utilized their time in both years in working. Travelling to work was the least activity in first year while, it changed and going out with friends was become the least activity in second year.

In both years 1958 and 2008, working took the biggest ratio that were 33% and 42% respectively. In 1958, travelling for work was the least activity that was doing by working adults and the proportion of it was only 2%. In contrast, it increased in 2008 and reach 7%. Going out with friends covered 19% in 1958 but in 2008, it was become the least activity and it only took 6%.

The second big percentage of the day was covered by sleeping in both years that was respectively 32% and 25%. If we talk about relaxing in home then it covered 8% in 1958 but it's ratio was increased in 2008 and become 13%. Playing sports was the activity that was almost constant in both years and it took 6% in 1958 and 7% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You provide a clear overview of the main pattern: working takes the largest share in both years, while the least common activity changes from commuting in 1958 to socialising in 2008. The key figures for work, sleep, travel, relaxing and going out are generally reported accurately, and you make relevant comparisons across the two charts. However, the sports statement is not supported by the data: playing sports is shown only in 2008, at 7%, not at 6% in 1958 and 7% in 2008. This also means the claim that it was “almost constant” is inaccurate. To strengthen the response, report this category correctly and ensure the overview reflects the full set of activities without adding a value for a year in which it is not shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs comparing the main categories. Linking expressions such as “In contrast” and “If we talk about” help signal relationships between points, and the reader can follow the broad comparison. Some connections are nevertheless mechanical or unclear. For example, “In both years 1958 and 2008” is an awkward lead-in, while “The second big percentage of the day” does not clearly identify the comparison being made. The overview also repeats information that is then restated in the detail paragraphs. Grouping the categories more deliberately—for example, major shares first, then smaller activities—and using clearer references would make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to describe the chart and make comparisons, including “proportion,” “increased,” “least activity” and “covered.” However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural, which limits clarity and flexibility. “The ratio of working adults that how they spent their time” is not an appropriate way to describe the charts, and “second big percentage” is an informal, awkward phrase. “Relaxing in home” and “playing sports was almost constant” also show problems with collocation or meaning. Aim for standard chart language and avoid repeating “covered” and “activity.” More precise terms such as “share,” “accounted for,” and “category” would help you describe the data naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “but,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. However, errors occur frequently in sentence construction and verb forms. For example, “the ratio of working adults that how they spent their time” has an incorrect clause structure, and “it was become the least activity” uses an incorrect verb form. There are also agreement and tense problems in “working took the biggest ratio that were 33% and 42%,” and “it increased in 2008 and reach 7%.” These errors make some sentences difficult to process. Practise forming accurate past-tense comparisons and checking that subjects agree with their verbs; shorter, well-controlled sentences would improve accuracy.

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