Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart shows us how working adults spent their time from 1958 to 2008. The are two diagrams given which show exact no. of data. As we can see most of the adults spend their time working i.e, upto 42% people. Talking about other activities we can see after working many people just like to sleep in their meantime. Apart from these two there are also many ways mentioned on how working adults spend their time like 19% people like to go out with their family and friends. Some likes to travel for work while others like to resting at home.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the topic and mention several activities, including working, sleeping, socialising, travelling and relaxing. However, the report only partially summarises the charts: it gives one accurate figure for 2008 work (42%) and one for 1958 socialising (19%), but does not systematically compare the two years or report the main changes. The statement that sleeping is the next most common activity is not supported for 2008, where it accounts for 25%, below working but above the other listed activities; the year is also unclear. You omit the notable rise in commuting and the appearance of sports in 2008. The response is 103 words, below the required 150, so there is insufficient coverage. Add a clear overview and accurate comparisons using key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, gives a broad comment about working, then mentions other activities. Phrases such as “As we can see” and “Apart from these two” attempt to connect ideas. However, there is no clear overall progression from an overview to organised comparisons, and the activities are presented in a loose list rather than grouped by changes or years. References such as “these two” are unclear because the preceding sentence does not clearly establish which two activities are meant. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two comparison paragraphs. Use linking expressions to show contrasts between 1958 and 2008 rather than relying on general transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small range of relevant vocabulary, including “working,” “sleep,” “travel,” and “go out,” so the general subject is understandable. However, several expressions are informal or imprecise for an academic chart summary: “just like to sleep,” “many ways mentioned,” and “people like to go out” describe preferences rather than neutrally reporting proportions. “Exact no. of data” is also unclear and does not accurately describe what the charts present. Aim for concise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “the proportion spent on.” Avoid repeating “people” and “activities”; more precise terms will help you compare the categories clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “Apart from these two there are also many ways mentioned…” However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence formation and verb patterns are noticeable. “The are two diagrams” is missing the subject pronoun, while “Some likes to travel” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. In “others like to resting at home,” the verb pattern is faulty; use “like resting” or “like to rest.” The opening also shifts awkwardly between present and past forms when describing the charts. Practise accurate comparisons using structures such as “the proportion rose from…to…” and check agreement, infinitives, and punctuation when editing.

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