Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts illustrate the time spent by workers over the peroid of 50 years; from 1958 to 2008.

In 1958, majority of the workers' time was spent working and sleeping, 33% and 32% respectively. This highlights the minimal time allocated towards family and friends and self relaxation. Travelling to work took a mere 2% and relaxing at home took just 8%,

On the other hand, 5 decades later in 2008, workers spent even more time working compared to 1958, a huge 42%! Moreover, they even spent less time sleeping at 25% down from 32% in 1958, however, more time was spent relaxing at home at 13% up from 8%. The travel time also saw an increase to 7%, more sports were also played at 7%. Nevertheless, family and friend time saw a massive deduction from 19% to 6%.

In conclusion, working adults spent more time working and getting to work in 2008 compated to 1958 while getting less time to spend with their family and friends.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main shifts accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and time with family and friends drops from 19% to 6%. You also report the increases in travel and home relaxation, and include sports in 2008. The opening comparison of work and sleep gives a useful starting point, but the response would be stronger with a concise overview that explicitly groups the biggest changes—for example, work becomes the largest share while socialising declines sharply. The conclusion repeats the work and family-time trends but omits the fall in sleep and the new sports category. Some points, such as the claim that there was “minimal” time for family and friends in 1958, are not well supported by the 19% figure, so keep descriptions closely tied to the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall progression: it introduces the period, describes 1958, contrasts it with 2008, and ends with a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand,” “Moreover,” and “Nevertheless” help signal comparisons, and the figures are generally presented in a readable sequence. To make the organisation more effective, separate the overview from the detailed comparisons and group related changes rather than listing them in one long paragraph. The sentence beginning “The travel time also saw an increase” moves quickly from travel to sports, while the final conclusion largely repeats earlier information. More deliberate grouping and clearer reference to the chart categories would make the progression feel more controlled and less list-like.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing change, including “increase,” “down from,” “up from,” and “deduction,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at emphasis, such as “a mere 2%” and “a massive deduction.” However, some choices are imprecise or informal for an academic report: “huge 42%” is better expressed neutrally, and “family and friend time” is less natural than “time spent with family and friends.” “Minimal time” also overstates the 19% allocated to socialising in 1958. Spelling slips such as “peroid” and “compated” are noticeable. Aim for precise, neutral terms and check spelling, while avoiding repeated emphasis where the figures themselves convey the scale.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons such as “more time was spent relaxing at home at 13% up from 8%” and the contrast introduced by “Nevertheless.” Most of the information remains understandable, but some grammatical and punctuation errors reduce accuracy. The opening fragment, “In 1958, majority of the workers’ time…,” needs an article (“the majority”), and “Travelling to work took a mere 2% and relaxing at home took just 8%,” ends with a comma rather than a full stop. The long sentence beginning “Moreover” joins several contrasting points without clear punctuation. Use complete sentences, check articles, and divide multi-part comparisons into shorter, accurately punctuated clauses.

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