Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given pie charts elucidate the percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities in five decades ([redacted phone]).

The overview of the charts make it conspicuous that there were different activities played in various percentages in distinct years.

Speaking of 1958, lion's share of adults spent their days by working while rat's share of them prefered travelling to work. 32 percentage was responsible for sleeping. Going out with friends and family was accounted for only 19 percent. Playing sports constituted 6%. Relaxing at home was four times of the percent of travelling to work.

Turning to 2008, enormous amount of days were spent by working by the adults. Playing sports and travelling to work comprised the same percentage in total (7%). The percentage of days spent on going out with friends was 6%. Sleeping was approximately the double of relaxing at home(13%).

To recapitulate, working had gained the ground while going out with friends and family took the backseat.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad shift towards working and away from socialising, and include several relevant comparisons, such as the equal 7% shares for sport and commuting in 2008. However, the account only partially reports the chart’s main features and contains important inaccuracies. In 1958, sport is reported as 6%, although it is not shown for that year; the chart instead gives 7% in 2008. You also omit the 1958 working and commuting figures, and do not state the 2008 working share of 42%. The overview is vague (“different activities … in distinct years”) rather than summarising the main changes. Select the largest categories and the clearest rises and falls, and report their values accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, separate descriptions of the two years, and a concluding summary. Phrases such as “Speaking of 1958” and “Turning to 2008” help signal the shift between chart years, while “To recapitulate” marks the ending. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information. However, the overview does not establish a useful organising comparison, and the final sentence repeats only two broad trends. Some details within each year are presented as a list rather than grouped by importance or change. To strengthen progression, give a clear overview of the main increases and decreases, then compare related categories across both years rather than treating each chart in isolation.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You show an adequate range and attempt less common expressions, including “lion's share,” “comprised,” “conspicuous,” and “took the backseat.” Some choices are inaccurate or too informal for a data report: “rat's share” is not an appropriate expression, and “activities played” does not collocate naturally. “Enormous amount of days” is also an awkward way to describe a percentage. There are spelling and word-form slips, including “prefered,” and “percentage” is repeated where “share” or “proportion” would be more natural. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the general message, but they reduce precision. Prefer straightforward, accurate chart language over idioms, and use terms such as “accounted for” consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including introductory clauses (“Speaking of 1958”) and a comparison with “while.” The main ideas are usually understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “The overview … make it conspicuous” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “32 percentage was responsible for sleeping” has an incorrect construction and number form. In “Sleeping was approximately the double of relaxing at home(13%),” the article and comparison structure are faulty, and punctuation spacing is missing before the parenthesis. The sentence patterns are also somewhat repetitive, with several short statements. Practise accurate structures for reporting proportions and comparisons, such as “Sleeping accounted for 32%, compared with 25% in 2008,” and check agreement and punctuation.

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