Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The circle charts compare how working adults in a specific country spent their time from1958 to 2008.

Overall, an enormous ammount of people spend there time in working in both charts, whereas, going out friends and family has reduced over the years.

It is clearly seen that , adults had spend their large time in working in 1958 it accounted for 33% and steadly it rose to 42% in 2008.By contrast, sleeping was there second most done activity in 1958 which was about 32% but it slightly decreased to 25% in 2008. Also, Traveling to work and Relaxing activies has increased over the years each increased 5%.

On the other side , grown up people are showing less interest in family gatherings , the numbers massively decreased from 19% to 6% from 1958 to 2008.That's a big change. But playing sports remained stable and it holds 7% still now.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall changes: working takes a larger share of the day, while going out with friends and family declines. Most figures are accurate, including work (33% to 42%), sleep (32% to 25%), and socialising (19% to 6%). However, the overview is imprecise: “an enormous amount of people” describes people rather than the proportion of time, and the claim that sports “remained stable” is unsupported because the chart gives no 1958 figure for this activity. The increases in travel and relaxing are correctly described as five percentage points each, but the response could compare the full pattern more clearly. The response is one word below the required minimum. Add a little relevant detail and clarify the overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs reporting details. This makes the information generally easy to follow, and contrasts such as “By contrast” help signal comparisons. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward, including “On the other side,” and “That’s a big change” is conversational rather than a useful comparison. The overview’s “whereas” construction is not clearly connected to the first clause, while the final paragraph moves from socialising to sports without explaining the relationship between them. Use clearer transitions and group the figures by increases and decreases, or by the largest and smaller categories, to create more consistent progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “accounted for,” “decreased,” and “increased,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. However, the range and control are limited by several inaccurate or unnatural choices: “an enormous amount of people,” “spend their time in working,” and “less interest in family gatherings” do not precisely describe percentages of time spent on activities. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “ammount” and “steadly,” and “activities” is misspelled as “activies.” Aim for precise, neutral reporting language, such as “the proportion of time devoted to work” and “the share spent socialising.” Avoid interpreting the figures as evidence of people’s interest or behaviour beyond what the chart shows.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “By contrast” and a clause beginning “which was about 32%.” The main meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction. For example, “adults had spend” should use a correct past form, and “an enormous amount of people spend there time” has problems with agreement, tense, and pronoun form. The sentence beginning “Overall” also joins contrasting ideas awkwardly, and punctuation is inconsistent around commas and full stops. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build comparisons in complete, clearly punctuated sentences; this would make your range more effective and reduce the effort required to follow the details.

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