Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts shows the percentages of adults that how they spent their day in different activities. There are two pie charts giving the information of adults activities . one is showing the activities od adults in 1958 and the other is about the information of adults in 2008. In 1958 , there is different percentage for different activities and in 2008 it id totally differs. In 1958,the major time is spent in working and relaxing also.adults spents 19 percent of their time wuth their family and friends and this is actually a quality time.Adults used to spend 8 percent of their time in relaxing in home.After many hours of working relaxation of mind is also nrcessary. They spent total 35 percent if their time in working and also travelling for working places.

In the year of 2008, adults spend their 49 percent of their time in working.They used to spend their 7 percent of time in playing games and 6 percent in outing with family and friends.They used to spend rest of their time in relaxing and sleeping.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two years and report several relevant figures, including 19% for time with friends and family in 1958, and 7% for sports and 6% for socialising in 2008. However, the response only minimally summarises the charts: it has no clear overview of the main changes, and some key comparisons are missing. The statement that adults spent 49% working in 2008 combines work and commuting; the chart shows 42% working, with commuting separately at 7%. Likewise, 35% in 1958 is the combined work-and-commuting figure, not working alone. Sleeping is mentioned only vaguely, and the 2008 figures for relaxing and sleeping are not reported. Focus on the largest categories and the most notable rises and falls, distinguishing each activity accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic chronological arrangement: it discusses 1958 first and then moves to 2008, so the reader can follow the broad time sequence. However, there is little overall progression beyond listing activities, and the opening repeats the task rather than giving a concise overview. Connections between ideas are often weak or mechanical; for example, “After many hours of working relaxation of mind is also necessary” shifts from chart reporting to a general comment. The paragraphing is also unclear, with the two years not separated into distinct, purposeful sections. Organise the response around an overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use clear links to show how the figures changed between years.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic activity vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “working,” “sleeping,” “relaxing,” and “travelling.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “different percentage for different activities” and “spend their time in.” Some word choices and spelling errors make the account less clear, including “activities od adults,” “wuth,” and “nrcessary.” Phrases such as “quality time” and “relaxation of mind” are evaluative rather than suitable for a neutral chart summary. Build a more precise set of reporting expressions, such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “fell to,” and check spelling and natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences, but most structures are simple, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response awkward. The opening, “The pie charts shows the percentages of adults that how they spent their day,” has subject–verb disagreement and an incorrect clause structure. Other examples include “it id totally differs” and “adults spents,” where verb forms are inaccurate. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistently controlled, as in “in relaxing in home” and the spacing around commas and full stops. These problems do not prevent the reader from understanding the broad topic, but they reduce clarity. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and simple comparison structures before adding more complex sentences.

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