Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the piechart depicts the information about the adults spend their time in working in particular country from 1958 to 2008, The date was given in percentage .

overall working and relaxing at home percentange was increase ,however spending time with family or friends was decrease and sleeping was slightly decrease,youngster spend timein playing sports remained same .

to begin with going out with family and friends was 19% in 1958 but after it was dramatically decrease and reached to 6% in 2008.however travelling to work was slightly increase from 2% to 7% in 2008,while youngster interest in playing sports reamined same in both years , moreover adults sleeping percentage was also decreased by 7% in 2008 ,moving towards to working teenager spend slightly more time in 2008 percentage was increased by 9%and relaxing at home percentage was grew from 8% in 1958 to 13% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the rise in working time from 33% to 42%, the fall in socialising from 19% to 6%, and the decrease in sleeping from 32% to 25%. However, the overview is not fully accurate: you say time spent playing sports “remained same,” but sports appears only in the 2008 chart, at 7%. The charts also show relaxing at home rising from 8% to 13%, which you report, and travelling increasing from 2% to 7%. Some descriptions are unclear or imprecise, such as “adults sleeping percentage was also decreased by 7%.” The response is four words below the required minimum. Include a clear overview and report the figures more precisely, without adding unsupported comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing individual categories. This helps the reader locate the main information, and linking words such as “however,” “while,” and “moreover” show attempts to connect comparisons. However, the progression within the final paragraph is difficult to follow because several categories are joined in one long sentence, and the links sometimes do not express a clear contrast or addition. For example, “while youngster interest in playing sports remained same in both years” interrupts the comparison of travel and socialising. Use separate sentences or a more systematic order, such as describing increases first and decreases second, and ensure each linking word accurately signals the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “percentage,” “decrease,” “increase,” and “reached,” so the reader can generally identify the trends you intend to report. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. Phrases such as “adults spend their time in working,” “youngster interest,” and “percentage was grew” are not natural ways to describe the data. There are also spelling errors, including “piechart,” “percentange,” and “reamined.” Aim for precise chart language and check spelling and word forms. For example, use “the proportion of adults who worked” and “rose from 8% to 13%” rather than awkward or incorrect constructions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine comparisons using clauses and connectors, as in “however travelling to work was slightly increase from 2% to 7% in 2008.” However, sentence structures are limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some statements difficult to understand. Examples include “the adults spend their time,” “working and relaxing at home percentange was increase,” and “adults sleeping percentage was also decreased.” These show problems with tense, subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Punctuation also needs attention: the opening sentence runs into the next clause, and several sentences lack clear boundaries. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build shorter, complete sentences before attempting longer comparisons.

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