Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The two pie charts illustrate the Proprotion of 24 hour day spent working adults an various country activities their time from 1958 to 2008.

Overall, the dailly spant time working aduits in verious country from1958 which is 33% However,In 2008 it 42% over the 50 year adults devoted significantly moer time

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the charts’ subject and includes one relevant comparison: working rose from 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008. However, it does not summarise the main features across the activities, and the overview is incomplete; the other figures and notable changes—such as sleeping falling from 32% to 25% and going out dropping from 19% to 6%—are omitted. The final sentence also stops before explaining what adults devoted more time to. The response is 99 words below the required minimum, leaving too little information to address the task adequately. To improve, provide a clear overview of the largest changes and compare several key categories using accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the charts, followed by a sentence beginning “Overall,” which signals an overview. The comparison of working in 1958 and 2008 gives the reader a starting point. However, the ideas do not progress into a complete summary, and the final sentence is unfinished, ending with “adults devoted significantly more time” without stating the activity. The transition “However” does not clearly express the relationship between the figures, which show an increase rather than a contrast. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the introduction, overview and key comparisons, and connect related changes with clear linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “pie charts,” “proportion,” “working adults” and “devoted … time,” so the topic is recognisable. However, spelling and word-form errors are frequent, including “Proprotion,” “dailly,” “spant,” “aduits,” “verious” and “moer.” These errors make the short response harder to read and reduce precision. The phrase “an various country activities” is also unclear, and “the proportion of a 24-hour day spent by working adults on various activities” would express the chart topic more naturally. Build a small set of accurate terms for describing proportions and changes, such as “accounted for,” “increased,” and “declined,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a complex opening description and an overview, but grammatical control is weak. In “The two pie charts illustrate the Proprotion of 24 hour day spent working adults an various country activities,” articles and prepositions are missing or incorrect, and the phrase does not form a clear grammatical structure. The second sentence shifts into an incomplete construction: “Overall, the daily … from 1958 which is 33% However, in 2008 it 42%,” with no clear main clause for the later figure. The final clause is also unfinished. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb—for example, “Working accounted for 33% of the day in 1958, rising to 42% in 2008”—and check punctuation between clauses.

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