Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of how a particular country's working adult spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, people spend a lot more time working now than before. They also spend less time sleeping and going out with family. This indicates that people have become more work oriented now.

In 1958, people spent majority of their time working, about one third of their time. Surprisingly they also spent almost one third of their time sleeping. also 19% of their time went towards their friends and families. Travelling to work also took barely any time in 1958.

In 2008, we can see that working adults started shifting to a more work focused lifestyle, spending 42% of their time working. On the other hand their sleep reduced to 25%. people also stopped spending as much time with friends and families and prefer relaxing at home which is indicated by the bump from 8% previously to 13% now. It also takes a lot more time to get to work now in 2008, taking 7% of workers time travelling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main shifts accurately: working rises from about one third to 42%, while sleeping and time with friends or family decline; you also report the increase in commuting and relaxing at home. The overview gives a clear general picture, and the comparisons are relevant. This reaches beyond a basic account because you select several key changes and support them with figures. However, some features are less fully covered: playing sports appears only in 2008 at 7%, but is omitted, and the claim that people “stopped spending as much time” with friends is broad without stating the fall from 19% to 6%. For a stronger response, include the new category and make the overview more precise, avoiding interpretations such as people becoming more work-oriented unless clearly framed as a chart-based inference.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into a brief introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years, so the reader can follow the comparison easily. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “On the other hand,” and “In 2008” help signal the progression, and the information is generally presented in a logical order. Some connections are less smooth: “also 19%” begins a sentence without a capital letter, while “Surprisingly” adds an evaluative tone rather than helping compare the data. The final paragraph also moves between work, sleep, socialising, relaxation, and commuting without consistently grouping related changes. To improve, organise the body around increases and decreases across both years, and use transitions that clarify comparison rather than simply marking the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “reduced,” “indicated,” and “travelling to work,” and the meaning remains clear throughout. There are also attempts at more descriptive phrasing, such as “work focused lifestyle” and “shifting,” though these are not always natural or precise for an academic chart summary. Phrases such as “spent majority of their time” and “a lot more time” are imprecise, while “bump” is too informal for describing a percentage change. Aim for concise, neutral reporting language and accurate collocations, for example “accounted for,” “increased,” and “declined.” This would make the vocabulary more precise without requiring unnecessarily complex wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast with “On the other hand” and a relative clause in “which is indicated by the bump.” Most sentences communicate the intended comparisons, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the proportion of how a particular country's working adult spent” has an awkward structure and singular-plural mismatch; “people spent majority” needs an article, and “people also stopped … and prefer” shifts tense within the sentence. There are also punctuation and capitalisation slips, such as the lowercase “also” and “people” after full stops. Review articles, agreement, and consistent past-tense reporting, and proofread sentence boundaries to improve accuracy while retaining varied structures.

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